Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In civilized and industrialized societies, human beings have always strived to improve their living standards and bring more convenience to their day-to-day lives. Today, it is axiomatic that youth usually want to be independence in their life. A plethora people possess the conviction that today young people make their decisions without any interference of their parents, whereas others might hold exactly the opposite view. I firmly endorse the first idea instead of the latter. In what follows, I am going to aptly delve into the most outstanding reasons to advocate my point of view.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that nowadays a number of learned and educated parents more increases that the past. By and large, it is established beyond any doubt that these educated people are well aware of the effect of being independence on their children's future. Therefore, parents raise their children independently so that they can make decision and do their works without the interventions of parents. In fact, it can give rise to self-satisfaction and self-esteem. For example, my friend is the successful individual in her career, because her parents learned her how to be autonomous person in life. In fact, they knew about the positive impact of independence on becoming prosperous person.
Another equally noteworthy point supporting this opinion is that today youth want to earn money by their own and they tend to live in houses, which are bought by them. It is no secret that, they tend to be independence person. In addition, the migration rate of young people dramatically increases in recent decade. In essence, it can be said that a greater number of youth have separated from their family and continue their life without of the parents' interference. It should be stressed that ever success stems from being independence. One of the startling facts, which flabbergasted me is that people think erroneously that mature cannot make decision independently. The noteworthy statistics, revealed by a social research conducted in most famous company in my country, shows that the most successful employees are those who had autonomous characteristic in their life. So, there is the solid bond between independence and being successful.
To put it in briefly, all the enumerated reasons lead to the conclusion that today youth more become independence than the past due to an increase of educated parents and their willingness to be autonomous. However, a paramount issue that must be mentioned is that this can not be used as a prescription for everybody and some counterexamples might exist, which are not mentioned above. As a result, I suggest conducting to more surveys and studies to answer this question more precisely.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 447, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'parents'' or 'parent's'?
Suggestion: parents'; parent's
... and continue their life without of the parents interference. It should be stressed tha...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
briefly, first, however, if, so, therefore, well, whereas, for example, in addition, in brief, in fact, as a result, by and large
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2320.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 444.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22522522523 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5903493882 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98681173748 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529279279279 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 718.2 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.0989156058 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.454545455 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1818181818 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.86363636364 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.240540210853 0.236089414692 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0669380080157 0.076458572812 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0738056372336 0.0737576698707 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15501857167 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.059194627016 0.0645574589148 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.58 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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