Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In civilized and industrialized societies, job has played always a pivotal role in human beings' lives. Today, it is axiomatic that people usually elapse the longer part of their life working. A plethora of people possess the conviction that it is better for having a job where one works five days a week for shorter hours, whereas others might hold exactly the opposite view. Whether one agrees or disagrees with this depends on the lens through which one is looking. I firmly endorse the former conviction instead of the later one. In what follows, I am going to aptly delve into the most outstanding reasons to advocate my viewpoint.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that working only a few days for long hours is very cumbersome and tiring. Also, it should be stressed that working for long hours can have negative impacts on human health, while health is one of the most important factors contributing to life. It is also important to bear in mind that whoever overworks for a vocation for only a few days may lose her or his willingness to work that job. In my own experience, I am a civil engineering and work for the company five days a week but with standard working hours. For this reason, I have never been tired of my work. Consequently, I would not have liked my vocation had I not had acceptable working hours.
Another equally noteworthy point supporting this opinion is that people can have other programs without anxiety after working. In fact, it increases the feeling of personal control over schedule. Accordingly, we can plan to go to the other classes we need to attend on a regular basis. It is no secret that it can give rise to life satisfaction and happiness. One of the startling facts which flabbergasted me is that some people erroneously only work one day and do not have other plans for that day. For example, my best friend is used always to going to the gym after work, because she likes to exercise every day. In essence, she has the different programs in one day. Hence, life does not get boring for her.
To put it in briefly, all the enumerated reasons lead us to the conclusion that working only five days a week for shorter hours can not only lead to a lack of workload, but can also lead to consideration of other programs for one day. However, a paramount issue that must be mentioned is that this can’t be used as a prescription for everybody and some counterexamples might exist, which are not mentioned above. As a result, I suggest conducting more surveys and studies to answer this question more precisely.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 150, Rule ID: A_LOT_OF_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun workload seems to be countable; consider using: 'a lack of workloads'.
Suggestion: a lack of workloads
... for shorter hours can not only lead to a lack of workload, but can also lead to consideration of ...
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Line 7, column 518, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...to answer this question more precisely.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, briefly, but, consequently, first, hence, however, if, look, may, so, whereas, while, for example, in brief, in fact, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2126.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 455.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67252747253 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61852021839 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64890879188 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514285714286 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 668.7 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.9835670906 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.4347826087 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7826086957 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.4347826087 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.361534328734 0.236089414692 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0989561892201 0.076458572812 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0948033298367 0.0737576698707 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.226704850586 0.150856017488 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0703026999581 0.0645574589148 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.81 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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