Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.
decision-making is an important trait of a human being. Through life, every people encounter some crucial moments that need a decision be made for them. Thus, those individuals who have learned how to make a good choice in given situation are the successful ones, and parents' role in this issue is undeniable. The controversial question which arises here for people is whether young people depend on their parents to make decisions in the past or today. In my opinion, today's' young people are more independent in decision-making from their parents. In the ensuing lines, I will delve into the most outstanding reasons to advocate my viewpoint.
The first reason coming to my mind is concerned with the issue that today young people have more communications. In our contemporary era, Juveniles have a significant amount of access to their have relationship with their friends and other people. In this situation, I believe people would learn how to make a good choice because they learn how to socialize and how to deal with problems by themselves. According to a recent research, children who were grown up in the suburb areas seemed to be shy and timid rather than urban born and raised children. By that, we may also conclude the more shyness a child will feel, the less he is likely to make his decisions.
Another equally important reason to be mentioned is that today parents do not spend the time they would spend in the past with their children. parents are involved in the hectic life of cities, and as a result, they have less time to spend with children. So, teenagers might be more determined to make decisions autonomously about their lives, owing to lack of enough attention from their parents. As an illustration, when I was in high school, I had a friend which his parents were both working hard and he was alone at home most of the time. I remember he would make many decisions by himself, such as buying his clothes. this was odd because most of us, at that age, we depended on our parents for this kind of works.
Finally, from what has been discussed above, we may reach a conclusion that young people make more independent decisions nowadays than in the past. they have more communications and less attention from their parents. As a result, they will learn how deal with their simple needs and decisions and gradually, this ability expands to greater and bigger decisions they will meet in their life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, if, may, so, thus, kind of, such as, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2029.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 419.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84248210024 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52432199235 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6547169235 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503579952267 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 613.8 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.0218675283 48.9658058833 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.45 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.95 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.25 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.383278263159 0.236089414692 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125373907457 0.076458572812 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111164972724 0.0737576698707 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.255558059484 0.150856017488 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0950333515907 0.0645574589148 147% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.64 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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