Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In this modern age, it is almost impossible to state with certainty what will effect a person's life or not. Researchers have shown that most of the time, unrelated events do not play a significant role in a person's life and thereby, the person may not need to pay much heed to those events. However, I believe it is not possible for a person to know beforehand what event can play a significant role in his or her life. So, people should have knowledge of events occurring all over the world. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, people are not omniscient, they cannot know beforehand what event will affect their life or not. If people learn about the current affairs around the world, they may be able to estimate which of the events may play an important role in their life and can plan accordingly. It is especially true if the forthcoming effect is negative. People can often prepare themselves to face these and as a result may mitigate the damages. In the absence of such precaution, the result might be often devastating. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. I used to work with a small oil company. The company's owner had good judgment and he used to keep tabs on global events. I knew that one of my friend's dad owns an oil company. But being old-fashioned, he was not much adept at paying attention to global events. As a result, when there was a treaty signed between major oil corporations and some of the world's biggest oil exporting counties, we immediately knew that oil price would go up and bought as much oil as possible to avoid future losses. But my friend's father didn't know about the event and knew only after the oil price had already risen. As a result, they suffered severe loss in their business, while the company I worked for thrived. From this I learned the value of paying attention to current events.
Secondly, more knowledge comes with more opportunities. People might not know what opportunities are available in the world without knowing what events are taking place around the world.
In conclusion, the issue of whether people should pay heed to current world events is a complex issue with people on both sides. But as people cannot know what will affect their life before it start affecting, they should pay attention to the occurrences around the world. Also, by paying heed to the current events, they may be able to help out people in need and find opportunities which would have otherwise gone unnoticed.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, while, i feel, in conclusion, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 9.8082437276 234% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2099.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 446.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.70627802691 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5955099915 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5416407817 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.486547085202 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 646.2 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.8494745316 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.4583333333 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5833333333 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.25 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.183023789278 0.236089414692 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0528559316763 0.076458572812 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0537450926044 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124702351106 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00663057162168 0.0645574589148 10% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.29 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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