Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Most advertisements make products seem much better than they really are.
living in a commercially era, generally speaking, could have both benefits and drawbacks. In this competitive world, all of the companies wanting progression use several methods in order to increase selling of their products. For achieving this aim, sometimes they utilize some nonrealistic advertise that maybe they do not true about the quality of the determined merchandise. However, the controversial question which is often raised regarding this topic among human beings is whether or not all of those advertisements make the products look much better than they are. I, to a considerable extent, hold the positive opinion about the statement. my reasons are manifold, two of the most conspicuous of which in order to justify my view will be explored in the following essay.
First of all, one of the most remarkable reasons is directly related to this importance that all companies precisely know this fact that the member of a society easily trust to what they see in the advertise. In other words, since it is proved scientifically that the vast majority of people rapidly trust to commercial broadcasting in TV, billboards, brushers and so on and so forth, company authorities utilizing this fact in their advertisements. Furthermore, they tend to depict their goods with high quality without any problem. so they not only deliberately do not demonstrate their weak points of their goods, but also, add some strong and eye catching features to their products.
Second and equally exquisite point of this assertion is associated with this point that nobody wants to purchase some products with defect. By knowing this way of thinking existing in all costumers, authorities of companies pursuing more and more profitable trading in their career even if they know that their goods have some weaknesses, never ever depict them. To give a tangible example, as we live in a world in which all person wants to access prosperity, consider two companies that both of them are supposed to present the same commodity. In such circumstances, if one of them use a novel attractive way of advertisement for depicting the product, costumers indirectly will be absorbed to that company. consequently, in order to being active in the market, companies use method that make their product more memorable.
All in all, considering the aforementioned arguments, we may draw the conclusion that people working in commercial section of companies by knowing some lucrative information about the way of their costumers thinking and also their favorites, know that for competing with other competitors they have to show their goods as best as they can. so, sometimes, they use and add some unrealistic privileges to their merchandise.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, however, if, look, may, regarding, second, so, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2288.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 438.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22374429224 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57476223824 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9775085948 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.538812785388 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 709.2 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 66.3271226365 48.9658058833 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.588235294 100.406767564 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7647058824 20.6045352989 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.05882352941 5.45110844103 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163318434673 0.236089414692 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0566650241776 0.076458572812 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0563544856801 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106743126172 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0624156549299 0.0645574589148 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 11.7677419355 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.2 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 86.8835125448 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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