Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents' jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents` jobs.
Regarding the status que of economic in people`s life, all member of a community for affording their life expenditure, must have a precious career. A plethora of people may hold the view that it could be better for children to follow their parents` jobs. others, on the other hand, may radically hold an opposite view point and allege that it will be better for children to select wholly different job from their family`s jobs. I am of the opinion that the latter idea is true. my reasons are manifold, two of the most conspicuous of which in order to justify my idea will be explored in the following essay.
First of all, one of the most remarkable proofs of this claim is related to this importance that gaining success in life is a long term consequence of pursuing interest. In other words, if children decide to pursue their parents` profession, they will restrict their opportunity in order to enter to their favorite route. To shed more lights on this matters, consider a boy that has a dramatic gift in music, especially in playing guitar and he literally believes that he is able to be a famous guitarist, and on the other hand, the father of this boy is a farmer. With respect to all kind of profession, if this boy determines his future work as a farmer, just because of his father, and ignore his immense talent in playing guitar, he totally destroys his life since he relinquishes his interest.
Second and equally exquisite point of this assertion is mainly about this issue that since choosing a career will be one of the most noteworthy time of each individual`s life, so they must spend much more time in order to find the suitable profession, instead of just follow parents` job with close eyes. one of the best approaches, in order to select the correct job, could be going to university. this could be very lucrative for children since entering to university contribute to broaden their horizon, so they will be capable of walking through the best and suit way. if person do not pay much more attention when they are selecting a job for themselves, since they have to do that job for a long period of time, beyond a shadow of doubt, after a while they will get exhausted from that job.
All in all, considering the aforementioned arguments, choosing the parent`s job will not be the only best way for children, and a false selecting could have detrimental effects on one's life. pursuing interest alongside with importance of selecting career are two reasons that I think choosing parents` jobs, always, will not the best way for children. And also much more time and efforts will be required to figure out the best job.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, regarding, second, so, while, i think, kind of, first of all, in other words, with respect to, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2225.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 465.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78494623656 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64369019777 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77121286902 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.477419354839 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 689.4 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 64.9363871416 48.9658058833 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.0625 100.406767564 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.0625 20.6045352989 141% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.6875 5.45110844103 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.30860810172 0.236089414692 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113034373997 0.076458572812 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0916395370783 0.0737576698707 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.204810821453 0.150856017488 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0764949893711 0.0645574589148 118% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 11.7677419355 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 58.1214874552 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.04 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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