Do you agree or disagree with the following statement.
Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.
Since time immemorial, visual representations have played a prominent role in each individual's identity. With the galloping rate of technology development, people, especially youngsters attract to media more than ever. A controversial question which is often raised regarding this idea is whether films and TV shows have negative influences on youngsters' behavior or not. From my perspective, they do have detrimental effects on their behavior. In the following paragraphs, I will substantiate my viewpoint.
The first vital point to bear in mind is that sometimes these movies and TV shows contain inappropriate content, which could affect teenagers' personality negatively. There is no disguising the fact that impressionable adolescents are under the direct impact of what is represented to them. For instance, some movies nowadays, in order to attract more viewers, utilize an inordinate number of sexual scenes in their movies to be more appealing to the public. Obviously, this will have detrimental effects on teenagers who need to concentrate on their educations and other aspects of their lives to achieve prosperity. Psychologically speaking, humans should pay attention to different needs in different stages of their lives. In other words, there is a certain age for each natural need to be satisfied. Sexual desires should be addressed in other ages when youngsters become more mature unless it will result in engendering traumas and complexes in their personality, which could be depicted within their personality traits.
The second noteworthy reason is that some movies contain numerous violent scenes, which could spread violence between young people. In other words, some movie scenes accentuate violent scenes in order to be more exciting and also to stay in business and earn more money out of selling more tickets. I firmly contend that these kinds of movies represent and enlist violence and crime in an ornamental form to achieve their aim, which will culminate in the burgeoning rate of juvenile delinquencies. A study that recently conducted in my country revealed that young people, who are into violent movies, are more vulnerable to do crimes, and a considerable number of people in prison were inclined to such movies at their young ages. Had they not watched such movies, they would have never been in prison.
To wrap it up, based on the aforementioned grounds, one can draw a conclusion that movies could have detrimental effects on teenagers' personality traits. First, they will access kind of material such as sexual content sooner. Second, some movies escalate violence among young people. Consequently, it is highly recommended for authorities to pay remarkable attention to the content of movies that are producing at a growing pace.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
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Suggestion: youngsters'; youngster's
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'teenagers'' or 'teenager's'?
Suggestion: teenagers'; teenager's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, if, regarding, second, so, for instance, kind of, such as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2344.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 435.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.38850574713 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56690854021 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95262814244 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.544827586207 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 729.0 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.613290897 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.619047619 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7142857143 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.7619047619 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.19744403344 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0559626190305 0.076458572812 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0459000820724 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125955230145 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0353424291207 0.0645574589148 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.98 10.9000537634 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.06 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 86.8835125448 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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