Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries.
Whether or not people benefit more from traveling mother country than the journey to abroad places? In my point of view, I think moving to different parts of the world has myriad advantages than just roaming in our own country. I feel this way for a few reasons, which I will explore in the following passage.
First of all, traveling abroad will have increased job opportunities, because of the availability of a wide variety of educational systems. Education is has become indispensable in the present day, in order to get a better profession. My own experience is a compelling example of this. I did my bachelor's in agriculture field. I was interested to pursue further in my career; unfortunately, I couldn't find any college’s that offers master in agriculture at my place. Later, I applied to the University of Texas A, which was renowned for the agricultural sector. Ultimately, I got admission and migrated to The USA. Consequently, I did my post-graduation with a gold medal; also got a lecturer post in the same campus. Hence, I started to earn more money. As the saying goes “Killed two birds with one stone”. If had not moved to a foreign country I would not be thriving today.
Next, going to different place helps to increase knowledge, because of diversity in culture. For instance, In India, during my school days, I was thought the regional language called Kannada. At that time, I was not good at English. My friend Mr.Sam went to Germany two year back to do higher education in automobile engineering and was speaking English fluently. It inspired me as well to move to a foreign and study. Hence, I decide and went to The USA. I could see students from different part of the world in my college. Eventually, I learned different languages and their culture like English, Chinese, Korean, Spanish. If I had not decided to explore a different place, I would not be learned a wide variety of languages and knowledge.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that exploring to abroad have a lot of profits. Because it provides extensive employment opportunities because it can advance my education and raises my knowledge.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'Whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: Whether
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Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, hence, if, so, well, for instance, i feel, i think, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1795.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 364.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93131868132 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04922160313 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.571428571429 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 573.3 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.4512187753 48.9658058833 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 71.8 100.406767564 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.56 20.6045352989 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.24 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.142481264885 0.236089414692 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0368564551766 0.076458572812 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0729299718497 0.0737576698707 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0940100297811 0.150856017488 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0950895796616 0.0645574589148 147% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 11.7677419355 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 10.1575268817 87% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.72 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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