Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
Traveling is an important part of our lives. Most of us have experience of traveling at least once either inside the same country or to foreign countries. Some people believe it is more beneficial to travel in the same country, while others prefer to travel to foreign ones. In my view, it is more beneficial to travel to foreign countries. The rationale behind this will be elaborated in the next few words.
First, traveling to foreign countries make new experiences. As we travel to other countries, we get the chance to see different systems and to learn more from experts with different experiences. This may not happen if we kept seeing the professors from the same educational system. For instance, last year I went to Belgium during a student exchange program. I was an intern in my medical school so I have the chance to work in the University Hospital of Gent. During three months, I have learned a lot from the doctors, as they have a different way of approaching diseases. Moreover, It was very useful to see the medical health system in Belgium which is totally different from the one we have. Consequently, foreign countries have some more benefits.
Second, traveling to foreign countries is the best way to learn new languages. Traveling there is one of the most effective ways to learn or to improve new languages as there is an ability for daily training. Moreover, it can change our perspective of life and introduce new exciting cultures. For example, five years ago, I migrated to Turkey due to the war in Syria. I was able to learn the
Turkish language during just six months, because I was staying with Turkish students and practicing with them daily. I would not be able to do that If I were not living in Turkey. Also, living here allowed me to get a healthier lifestyle that I didn't have in my own country. I started to eat more vegetables and fruits just like the people here. Furthermore, Smoking was not banned in public areas in my own country, so I was so distressed there, but here it is banned. As we can see, traveling to foreign countries has more benefits of all.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, if, may, moreover, second, so, while, at least, for example, for instance, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1736.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 372.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.66666666667 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66988944175 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.508064516129 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 549.0 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.7072189347 48.9658058833 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 75.4782608696 100.406767564 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.1739130435 20.6045352989 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.65217391304 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.257790368269 0.236089414692 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0806032586839 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0720996608928 0.0737576698707 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153724169299 0.150856017488 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0586176836135 0.0645574589148 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 11.7677419355 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.51 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.49 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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