Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do.

Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Submitted by ssmtariq on Tue, 09/03/2019 - 00:09

Humans activities keep changing overtimes. Nowadays, peoples are frequently be seen doing self satisfactory and enjoyment stuffs more and more. I believe this because of three basic reasons which I will be exploring all over the passage.

First of all, people get motivated by social media specially facebook, youtube, instagram etc. In this edge of modern era, billions of people are connected with social media. They get interested in certain places to travel, foods to have, movies to watch and other activities to perform by watching other peoples posts over the widespread social media network. For example, I have recently visited SIKKIM a state of the country India. I didn't knew about that state of India even a year ago. A few months earlier of my visit, I joined a facebook travel group named Adventure Madness and I found so many posts from the group members who were travelling SIKKIM that time. I got fascinated by seeing the beauty of tourists spots at SIKKIM. I saw yaks, snowfalls, high mountains, lot of beautiful tunnels, and the river Tista's glamour of blue water flowing from high mountains. I became more interested to see that those places are only 650km from my current city and then I planned a trip to SIKKIM. The same thing happened during the last release of Avengers movie series The End Game. I found reactions of millions of Avenger movie fans over youtube and became crazy to watch it. Later I have brought few of my office colleagues to enjoy the movie altogether. This is how social media influences people to do personal enjoyment stuffs more and more.

Secondly, communication is getting much easier and safer now than the past times. For instance while going for a movie or traveling to some places we can figure out unknown spots very quickly using Google Map navigation, we can use Uber ride sharing services, can book tickets for hotels and events using Booking.com. Apart from this, roads and highways have became much safer as traffics are now equipped with smart speed gun, cc cameras to control vehicle movement over the roads.

For the above reasons I have stated people are doing more and more

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 438, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
... SIKKIM a state of the country India. I didnt knew about that state of India even a y...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 874, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...blue water flowing from high mountains. I became more interested to see that thos...
^
Line 9, column 360, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'become'.
Suggestion: become
...part from this, roads and highways have became much safer as traffics are now equipped...
^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, second, secondly, so, then, while, apart from, as to, for example, for instance, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1789.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 365.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90136986301 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43153424642 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.621917808219 0.524837075471 118% => OK
syllable_count: 555.3 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.3183195072 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.45 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.25 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.2 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.127576911449 0.236089414692 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0385384424933 0.076458572812 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0560128743886 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0979973194621 0.150856017488 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0515760924017 0.0645574589148 80% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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