Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are Which to the two approaches do you prefer?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
As we all know, nowadays people overall are very busy, including parents. One the other hand, spending time with children is very important as well. So, parents should manage the time in order to find get some free time that can be spend with their children. The y can either play games or sports, or help their kids with school activities. In my opinion is better to spend more time doing things related to schoolwork rather then playing other games.
The most important thing for children is to be good students, because their future depends from that. Also, they are the future of our society. It is the parents responsibility to help them with their homework and other stuff, so they can succeed. My son is on fourth grade and he always needs my help to get done his homework. I have been helping him since he started the school, and now he is a honor student. Also, he has lots of friends that love and respect him. Furthermore, I feel so proud and so happy about him. All this because I have spend so much time working with him.
In addition, sometimes kids have to do some school projects that are so hard for their ages and they need some help. And no other can help them better than their parents. My friend's daughter is in kindergarten. The other day she had a school project where she needed to talk about a family vacation and also to draw the place where she spent the vacation. so, it was so hard for her to do that. Of course my friend or her mother helped her. She did the project in a different paper and let her daughter to copy it. If my friend did not have time or if she would spend the time playing games and other stuff, she would not have time to finish her daughter's project and her little girl would feel embarresed front of her classmates.
In conclusion, spending time with kids playing games and having is the most valuable thing a parent can do. But, helping them with their school activities and with other things like homework is priceless.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'than'? 'than' is used for comparisons, 'then' is an expression of time.
Suggestion: than
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, so, then, well, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, of course, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1612.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 364.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.42857142857 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.23126314026 2.67179642975 84% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.491758241758 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 478.8 618.680645161 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.6804818862 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 70.0869565217 100.406767564 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.8260869565 20.6045352989 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.52173913043 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.294065542385 0.236089414692 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0914426833905 0.076458572812 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0913174238254 0.0737576698707 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.224605908173 0.150856017488 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0926897317786 0.0645574589148 144% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.4 11.7677419355 63% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 81.63 58.1214874552 140% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.6 10.1575268817 55% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 8.12 10.9000537634 74% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.33 8.01818996416 79% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 86.8835125448 52% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 6.0 10.247311828 59% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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