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Smartphones have caused more harm than good in our society

There is not doubt that we live in an era where using the technology is unevitable. Smartphones are one of the most devices people use nowadays and they have been tremendously helpful for everyone. I feel this way some some reasons that I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, mobile phones helps us to saty conected with our friends and family. They makes us feel closer to each other, even though we might live far away. I hold this idea due to my personal experience. I live in United Stated, while all of my family are back in my hometown which is Albania. Sometimes, when I am homesick I can call my brother or my mother and talk to them and after I speak with them I feel more relaxed and happy. The phone also helps me to stay conected with my friends all over the place by using social media like facebook. We share our lives there, like pictures, events and many more and that way we do not miss everyone a lot. If we would not be able to somehow comunicate with our loved one, we would have been more deppressed and unhappy. So, the phones contributed in maintaining our phsycological health in a good shape.
Furthermore, the smartphones play a significant role for our school assigments. I have downloaded the school application in my phone and I can look every anouncement that the university can make in terms of class locations, mid terms and much more. Also, I use the phone to read for my exams as I can save the textbooks in there and I have them with me all the time. When I am at work, during the break time I study for my mid terms using the phone. We also have a stydy group in skype with my classmates where we share ideas for every subject. As you can see there are numerous benefits that you can get only by using your smartphones.
In conclusion, I feel that moble devices are the most useful advent that people can possibly have. I would say that technology have made everyone's live easy and joyful.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 215, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: some
...y helpful for everyone. I feel this way some some reasons that I will explore in the fol...
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Line 1, column 237, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
.... I feel this way some some reasons that I will explore in the following essay. ...
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Line 2, column 90, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'They' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'make'
Suggestion: make
...ected with our friends and family. They makes us feel closer to each other, even thou...
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Line 3, column 546, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...where we share ideas for every subject. As you can see there are numerous benefits...
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Message: Use simply 'can'.
Suggestion: can
... are the most useful advent that people can possibly have. I would say that technology have ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, look, so, while, as for, i feel, in conclusion, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1584.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 361.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.38781163435 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4710290273 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.531855955679 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 526.5 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 25.8882212599 48.9658058833 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 79.2 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.05 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.45 5.45110844103 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.138629327731 0.236089414692 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0460099007914 0.076458572812 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0457235033029 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0850141411403 0.150856017488 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0196218340921 0.0645574589148 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.3 11.7677419355 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.89 10.9000537634 72% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.46 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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