Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
At school age, there are different educational roles with various impacts on the learners, and a traditional belief asserts that teachers have a dominant influence on the learning process of students. However, I believe that friends of a student have the most dominant impacts on her or his behaviors and characteristics. The ensuing paragraphs will elaborate on this claim.
First of all, both children and youth spend most of their time with friends, which means that they have more occasions to affect profoundly each other. To put it another way, during school ages, people spend most of their time with friends in different activities such as playing sport, video gaming, and intimate gatherings. On the contrary, Communications in the classes' atmosphere are more restricted than friendships owing to the lack of time during a class and plenty of students for whom the time should be allocated. By way of illustration, I can mention one of the famous soccer players in my country's national sports team about whom I watched a documentary movie beforehand. In this movie, he states a memory about his high school period when he has started soccer. This athlete said that having been a diligent student, he formed a friendship with one of his classmates, who was a soccer player in the school sports team. His friend regularly encouraged him to play soccer, and they had played together all afternoons and on weekends for a whole year. Finally, he joined a well-known sports team in his city; as a result, he failed in all of his school exams. School's authorities tried to dissuade him from doing sport, but he obsessed with playing soccer all of his time and had to abandon school to go on to play soccer more professional in another city. had our soccer champion not spent most of his time playing soccer with his friends and not been influenced by them, He would not be a national athlete today.
Secondly, each generation has a particular tendency and avenue in learning which could be strange for older people like their teachers. In other words, throughout time, the criteria such as trends and prevalent behaviors have been changed dramatically among children and young people since the lifestyle has become different. This way, the changes cause that teenagers are inclined to the same language and tendency, which is outlandish for teachers. There is a tangible example of this in today's schools. Imagine the different genres of music, nowadays, rap and hip-hop music are a trend among the adolescents of my country. However, most of the teachers are for a generation who were fans of the famous rock groups such as Pink Floyd, Radiohead, Metallica, Queen, and other groups in this music genre. The teachers almost believe that rap and hip-hop music is rubbish because of inappropriate and meaningless words in their lyrics. Conversely, students in their friendship groups enthusiastically listen to this kind of music and keep the text of songs in their mind and do particular dances for those. Rap is just an example; there are many things providing a sensible gap among the students with the teachers on their learning language and tendency. On the other hand, in our country, there is a small group of astute and conscientious teachers who try to conform themselves to learners and treat them as a peer friend for applying modern educational methods, but they are an exception, and the effect of friendly relationships are yet more notable on students.
To put it in a nutshell, I believe that the interaction among students causes a more influential impact on them in comparison to the role of teachers. This difference is because class time is shorter and more ephemeral than friendships time, and because peer friends have more similar favorite items in every aspect of their life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'classes'' or 'class's', 'classis's'?
Suggestion: classes'; class's; classis's
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Had
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, conversely, finally, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, thus, well, kind of, such as, as a result, first of all, in other words, on the contrary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 29.0 13.8261648746 210% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 92.0 52.1666666667 176% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3181.0 1977.66487455 161% => OK
No of words: 637.0 407.700716846 156% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99372056515 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.02382911018 4.48103885553 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74963072683 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 304.0 212.727598566 143% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.477237048666 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 949.5 618.680645161 153% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.86738351254 428% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 50.9237233517 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.24 100.406767564 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.48 20.6045352989 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.162405180097 0.236089414692 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0492464418987 0.076458572812 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0461376533214 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103128189719 0.150856017488 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.026338288439 0.0645574589148 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 11.7677419355 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 143.0 86.8835125448 165% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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