Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school.
In a matured person's life, job successfulness could stem from many factors, such as the ability to form a relationship with others. However, while this item is practical to have an employment opportunity to some extent, in my opinion, regular and precise engagement with the school's curricula is a more noticeable matter to have a successful job in the future. The ensuing paragraphs will elaborate on this claim.
First of all, communication skills are not necessary for most of the technical jobs which concentrate on designing systems. Indeed, priority for engineers is dominance over their particular context, which has been grasped during either school or university with studying hard. A case in point is computer programmers who Had they not learned mathematical courses influentially at school and computer science fundamentals in high school, they could not continue their way in university and subsequently in their job. In some cases, the highest level of relationship abilities for engineers is the group-working, which should be a part of the schools' educational program in an effective educational system. Likewise, they should be a diligent learner in school for the acquisition of it.
Secondly, if a specific job needs powerful communicational skills, both schools and universities have many related courses of study to enhance it. To put it another way, we have many working positions in the labor market, which need to have an expert on forming relationships. Because this proficiency is an academic ability for them, and they should achieve it as a specialized capability in university and beforehand in school by consistent endeavoring. A case in point, consider the example of a job position like the director of public relations. The people who engage in this realm should pass the academic units to achieve these abilities. Moreover, if a student, who is going to have such a job position, were meticulous and diligent in school, he or she would have perfect fundamental knowledge for the future job's way. This example confirms that learning communication skills, during the academic part of life, is an unavoidable prerequisite for future success in certain professions.
To put it in a nutshell, I believe that the student should be hard-working in school ages to have a decent future in their work, and being diligent is more critical than having relationship abilities for it. This higher importance is because some jobs like engineering need a high level of technical knowledge than social skills and because other employments for which this ability is a specialized need have many relevant academic courses to improve it with studying hard them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 14, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, likewise, moreover, second, secondly, so, while, such as, first of all, in my opinion, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2262.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 429.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27272727273 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55107846309 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06196831973 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.508158508159 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 717.3 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 57.6791627293 48.9658058833 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.058823529 100.406767564 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2352941176 20.6045352989 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.05882352941 5.45110844103 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.261831674801 0.236089414692 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0858450855349 0.076458572812 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0490126664213 0.0737576698707 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173375387405 0.150856017488 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0304312900416 0.0645574589148 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 11.7677419355 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 58.1214874552 65% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.11 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 86.8835125448 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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