Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The government should spend more money on improving access to the Internet than on public transportation.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Throughout the recent decades, the human lifestyle has become more and more complex and hectic, so governors encounter many new issues, which were not significant before, such as the needs of people to access the internet or urban transportation network conveniently. In my opinion, in each country, the budget planner authorities should give public transportation a higher priority in comparison with internet accessibility development. The ensuing paragraphs will elaborate on this claim.
First of all, traffic jam is one of the most challenging realms for the governors, which could be solved with an advanced public transportation network. To put it another way, if each person in a city uses his or her own personal car, all of the streets and highways will be obstructed. Plenty of vehicles in a town cause many detrimental consequences such as air and noise pollutions which damage the healthiness of people strongly. In addition, people waste time on this traffic jam, which affected negatively on the efficiency of workforces in a city. A case in point is London's subway system, which is successful in controlling traffic and air pollution in that city. In London, to access the subway is very convenient in each part of the town for citizenry; therefore, they prefer to use underground transportation systems instead of their personal cars. This reliable subway system is a significant contributor to turn this city into one of the thriving ones in this way. On the contrary, consider Indian's capital city transportation system as an example of a weak urban transportation service, which leads this city to one of the most crowded ones in the world. Finally, it is undeniable that other facilities of life such as a progressive internet network are necessary for today's life, but the priority is a healthy life in a peaceful city with no traffic and air contamination.
Secondly, unemployment is a dominant reason for many social problems, and ruling authorities could provide many job opportunities by expanding public transportation services. In other words, jobless people do not have a definite monthly salary or a regular task to do it, so they have a high potential for many criminal behaviors. In addition, if they have children, their situations will negatively affect their families. As a solution to this problem, the transportation system needs many employees who help governors to recruit many people. By way of illustration, Imagine a subway system as a part of an urban transportation network. A subway needs many workforces, including subway drivers, ticket sellers, security forces, controlling operator in the stations. All of these opportunities just create in a subway system; now, consider the enormous amount of job opportunities in entire parts of a transportation organization which encompass all kind of public bus systems, taxies, and online transportation systems. For further illustration, take the example of Uber, the online world-wide taxi service, which has provided many jobs for everyone quickly. To put it simply, a critical effect of public transportation development, which distinguishes it from other scopes like promotion of internet bandwidth, is rising employment.
To put it in a nutshell, I believe that authorities should pay more attention to the development of transportation systems in a city because this could make reduce the traffic jam and its subsequent problems and because this promotion could reduce the number of jobless people in the society.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 236, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
... city uses his or her own personal car, all of the streets and highways will be obstructed...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, in addition, kind of, such as, first of all, in my opinion, in other words, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 29.0 8.0752688172 359% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2971.0 1977.66487455 150% => OK
No of words: 557.0 407.700716846 137% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.33393177738 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.85807034144 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.19057242394 2.67179642975 119% => OK
Unique words: 274.0 212.727598566 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.491921005386 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 928.8 618.680645161 150% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 13.0 4.94265232975 263% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 57.7428933769 48.9658058833 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.045454545 100.406767564 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3181818182 20.6045352989 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.77272727273 5.45110844103 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0870109225037 0.236089414692 37% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0273305433762 0.076458572812 36% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0325096389448 0.0737576698707 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0656353047255 0.150856017488 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0391189620806 0.0645574589148 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 11.7677419355 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 58.1214874552 65% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.93 10.9000537634 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.13 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 150.0 86.8835125448 173% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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