Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they already know how to do well.
The modern world changes with an unprecedented speed due to the rapid development of technology. Some people believe that successful people merely do what they already know and keep doing it well, whereas I hold the view that successful people do more than that. Successful people have the strong interest in learning new things and are willing to take risks.
In the first place, successful people learn things to challenge and improve themselves. They would not be satisfied with what they already achieved. Taking the Apple Company as an example, its development team never settles. Firstly, they invented the Apple computer which was a breakthrough at the time. Then they surprised everyone with the iPod, another breakthrough which changed the way people listening to the music. Further, the iPhone came out, the first so-called the smartphone, which ended an old times and opened a whole new world of the mobile phone. Every year, people look forward to what new invention they will release to the world. Needless to say, the Apple is one of the most successful companies in the world which makes big impacts on current people’s life. I believe if the Apple is reluctant to learn new technology, it cannot have its achievement today.
Secondly, the will of taking risks is important to successful people as well. No one would doubt that Lady Gaga gained a huge success in terms of her music and her fashion style, which are very bold and unique. However, actually, before she released her first album, she had been playing music in a pub for a decade. If she did not take the risk, giving up her job and starting to do her music freely, she would not have reached such a big success today. In addition, although many people do not agree with her style, she does not give in to please those people. She would rather take the risk, keeping expressing what she likes.
It is true that in the past, people could acquire success by doing what they are already familiar with. However, nowadays the world changes fast and people put emphasis on creativity and innovation, it is impossible to reach success in the old way. In conclusion, I firmly believe that successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they already know how to do well.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 605, Rule ID: NEW_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'invention'.
Suggestion: invention
...Every year, people look forward to what new invention they will release to the world. Needles...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, first, firstly, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, then, well, whereas, in addition, in conclusion, it is true, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1892.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 392.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82653061224 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44960558625 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45201236533 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.510204081633 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 567.0 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.8854960505 48.9658058833 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 90.0952380952 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6666666667 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.95238095238 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.451960445175 0.236089414692 191% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.141775696217 0.076458572812 185% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.165803534325 0.0737576698707 225% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.332618018856 0.150856017488 220% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.173166978479 0.0645574589148 268% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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