Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Technology has made children less creative than they were in the past
I agree with this statement. Children are very effected by technology and this impact is not positive to childrens' creative. In my opinion, children has influence badly beacuse of technogly and I will explain it with three important reasons.
Firstly, children had more creative than nowadays beacuse children could creative a dream in their world, but it is almost impossible beacuse of technology. For example, old people had read a book which improved that children creativity. Also it influence children skills to create something. However nowadays, children usually watch a television program which is shown cartoons for them. Unfortunately, this kind of program reduce their brain capability and they never thing something beacuse these cartoons services different unrealistic world for them. In this reason they never been creative beacuse someone else had already creative something for them.
Secondly, children does not need to creat something and they usally prefer to buy new kinds of technological diveces instead of created them. Moreover most of children are not related with how these diveces are created by human. In this reason children become more costumer rather than creatives. For example, I had always interested in inside of techological diveces, when I was a child. I remember to once I had broken my grandmother television beacuse of this reason. However, nowadays children only care about buy some new technology product instead of how it was created by human. In the other word technology improve vastly but it impact getting worstly up on children in terms of creavitiy.
Thirdly, children had shared some valuable thing with their friends but nowadays children only watch a television or play a computer game. And it is make them a robots and they had forgetten think about something. However, in the past a child share thier ideas with his or her friends.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Also,
...hich improved that children creativity. Also it influence children skills to create ...
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...roved that children creativity. Also it influence children skills to create something. Ho...
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...ce children skills to create something. However nowadays, children usually watch a tele...
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...tic world for them. In this reason they never been creative beacuse someone else had alrea...
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... creative something for them. Secondly, children does not need to creat somethin...
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Suggestion: Moreover,
...ogical diveces instead of created them. Moreover most of children are not related with h...
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...veces instead of created them. Moreover most of children are not related with how these diveces ...
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...y human. In this reason children become more costumer rather than creatives. For example, I ...
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...other word technology improve vastly but it impact getting worstly up on children...
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...y a computer game. And it is make them a robots and they had forgetten think abou...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, for example, kind of, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1587.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 303.0 407.700716846 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23762376238 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17215713816 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69434303018 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 212.727598566 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.541254125413 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 490.5 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.1609357174 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.5263157895 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.9473684211 20.6045352989 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.47368421053 5.45110844103 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.225245824949 0.236089414692 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0800021927534 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0558747710915 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151376361196 0.150856017488 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0326348645385 0.0645574589148 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.4 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 86.8835125448 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.