Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Television advertising directed toward young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
TV advertisements have been around for as long as the TV itself. They are a medium to market any product to the millions of people worldwide. The advertisements not only help people connect with a certain product but also help them make an educated guess while purchasing these products. However, I feel that the advertisements targeted at young ones shouldn’t be allowed because of a couple of reasons.
First, the toddlers have a natural habit of grabbing anything and everything that is colorful and shiny, such as the content shown on the TV. For this reason, the young children can be easily persuaded by the advertisements. And if their demands are not fulfilled, they could even start throwing tantrums. For example, a couple of days ago my three-year-old niece was watching TV when a ‘Peppa Pig’ advertisement popped up. She demanded that toy ever since and her parents had to buy that overpriced family of ugly pigs. Her behavior can indirectly be linked to the TV advertisement. Imagine if, in the long run, she develops the same thought process of demand & conquer, what nightmare would it be for the parents?
Another reason or my contention towards TV advertisements is that they are a source of bad eating habits in many young children. Nowadays we have all kinds of fancy and lucrative advertisements promoting junk food. Naturally, the young ones are the first to get allured by the imagery and creativity of the ads. I remember a popular chocolate advertisement which is making rounds on TV recently. It is an extremely creative advertisement which shows a world made up of chocolate and even the characters are made from the chocolate. This advertisement is one of the favorites among kids and has turned many kinds into chocolate addicts which will lead to health problems down the road.
For the reasons stated above and many more, I am against the TV advertisements targeted towards children.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 386, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, while, for example, i feel, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1617.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 322.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02173913043 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03414734176 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.608695652174 0.524837075471 116% => OK
syllable_count: 501.3 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.3548937575 48.9658058833 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 89.8333333333 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8888888889 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.88888888889 5.45110844103 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.135337175313 0.236089414692 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0450308709159 0.076458572812 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0467621514398 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0932183040358 0.150856017488 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0215846726929 0.0645574589148 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.54 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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