Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.
Children are very important members of our society. The are like flowers, in order for them to bloom, they need the guidance of their parents and guardians. Just like flowers that needs the sun and nutrients for them to become a beautiful flowers. Generally speaking, I believe that television advertising that directs towards young adult ages two to five should not be allowed. I feel this way for several reasons:
First, it is beneficial to consider the importance of age. As we all know that most children don't really know how to recognize what is right from wrong, most of them are very fragile and there is of great tendency that they will be influenced greatly with the advertisement that's being shown on the television. I can provide a very concrete example of this from my own niece, when she was little we always watch television together because of her favorite show. There's this one commercial that I always remember where in the kid throws water to her sibling and she always find it cool since she claps her hands every time she sees this. One day, we were eating lunch and I was shocked that she did exactly the same thing on what she has witnessed on the television, from that day, she was not allowed to watch her favorite television show anymore.
In addition to the importance of age , it is also important to consider the parents' time. To explain more of this, most parents are working and often times children are being left to baby sitters for the time being that parents' aren't around. I believe that the person that gives the full concern and love to their child are their parents and so from the moment that they aren't around they can't correct and give some lessons to their children whether what they've seen on the television's advertisement is good or bad. So, my brother and his wife works full-time and the only way they can do it is to hire a baby sitter to watch for my nieces, though this person that they hired is very good with regards to keeping them safe, but she isn't really into disciplining and giving the kids lessons that what they've seen on the television should not be followed.
Finally, I believe that the influence of television will destroy the chid's development. We all know that children are very emotional, if they see a very nice toy on the commercial, they cry very loud and ask for that toy and in most cases parents will grant their child's wish. This is what I was talking about will come, it will delay or destroy child's development by depriving the child to play outside of the house because of this toy. An example of this is that when my nephew got this toy that he saw from the advertisement on television, he stopped playing with his educational toys, rather he was hooked that action hero figure and because of that the chance of improving his memory and reading skills is being replaced with that action hero figure which I believe didn't do good to his memory development.
By way of conclusion, according to the arguments stated above, I am of the opinion that in most cases it is more beneficial for the television stations not to cater advertisement that are directed towards young adults ages two to five.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, really, so, i feel, in addition, talking about, in most cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 32.0 15.1003584229 212% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 28.0 11.0286738351 254% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 95.0 43.0788530466 221% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2614.0 1977.66487455 132% => OK
No of words: 567.0 407.700716846 139% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.6102292769 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.87972968509 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42089436324 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 264.0 212.727598566 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.465608465608 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 807.3 618.680645161 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 31.0 20.1344086022 154% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 87.5543570138 48.9658058833 179% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.222222222 100.406767564 145% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.5 20.6045352989 153% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.11111111111 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 5.5376344086 289% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201476680969 0.236089414692 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0749647984045 0.076458572812 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.113809500605 0.0737576698707 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140284169876 0.150856017488 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0728045485483 0.0645574589148 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 11.7677419355 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.93 58.1214874552 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.05 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.0537634409 143% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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