Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The extended family(grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles.) is less important now than it was in the past. Use specific examples and reasons to support your answer.
I agree with the statement that the extended family has become less important than it was before . In the past, there were the threats of bombings in the cold war or money depressions that place higher important on sticking and working together. However, there has been a change in the values of our world today that have severed many important relations between family members.
First, with new technology, older generations of grandparents and some aunts may be seperated into a different world. One example is instant messaging and email. Most young people use these ways to talk constantly with friends and other people, and consider this more exciting and important than talking with extended family members.
Also, students today are becoming more and more busy with school, after school activities, and homework. High achieving students take numerous advanced classes, overload on homework, and have little time to spend with the other members of the family. Other children are constantly involved in after school sports and activities that take up most of their time. Because of the importance placed on good grades, better test scores, and after school activities, the significance of the extended family has been decreasing.
Finally, families are becoming farther apart because of distance. Gone are the times in which families lived close together or in the same house, and have evenings with quality family times. In my case, I live halfway across the planet from the rest of my family and only get a few moments to talk to the phone with them every few months and a few weeks together during school vacation. Some other family members live so far away that I rarely get to talk to them, let alone meet them.
Therefore, the extended family has become less important because other values and factors have come into place. There is less communication going between them, less time to spend together, and more distance to travel to be with them. Extended family members have become quite seperated from the rest of the family than in the past.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 97, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...become less important than it was before . In the past, there were the threats of ...
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Line 13, column 73, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
...farther apart because of distance. Gone are the times in which families lived close...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, however, if, may, so, therefore
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 43.0788530466 46% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1739.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 342.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08479532164 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30037696126 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40677926332 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.53216374269 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 547.2 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.0129734409 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.294117647 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1176470588 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.11764705882 5.45110844103 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215441779869 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0813405468951 0.076458572812 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0874488318604 0.0737576698707 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137873101858 0.150856017488 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.067496557579 0.0645574589148 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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