Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
What is a family? How important is to have a family? A family is a group of members who came from the same ancestor, sharing the love and support each other, in order to live a peaceful life. Some think that the extended family like grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles are less important in a contemporary day. In my view, I disagree with the above postulate. According to me, it is highly significant and has a myriad advantage to have a large family. I feel this way for a few important reasons which I will explain in the following passage.
To begin with, having more members of a family will enhance our exuberant, fun, and enjoyment. Life is all about to enjoy and relax completely during the weekend, in order to get recharged for the upcoming busy next work week. Having many people at home helps to divide the work and finish it soon and calm the rest of the day. My own experience is a compelling example of this. My family is very big, consisting of ten individuals. We domicile in south Texas. When I was twenty, I was studying at the University of Houston. I did political science as my major subject. It was a tight schedule for me in the class, as I had a lot of assignment and conference to attend all the week. I usually get stressed and upset, because of these loads; I won't get time to attend any sports or even to watch television. On the other hand, my family members were great to support me; they assist me to do my homework and do free massage for me at home. Consequently, It alleviates my blood pressure, depression and rejuvenates my body. In short, If I had not had my loved ones, I would not be thriving today.
Next, It is super easy to quest a job in a family of big. Having more people at home means having a wide variety of knowledge in different sectors. Even a highly educated person is unemployed today because of lack of experience. For instance, My brother did his masters in exercise physiology from California University and it was tough to get employment for him. He didn't have any experience as well. One fine day he was frustrated and furious. Fortunately, my uncle Mr. Jim owned a gym; In fact, he was looking for someone who knows him very well and meat my brother and said him to join in his own gym as a personal trainer. As the saying goes " known devil is better than an unknown devil". Later, he started to earn a good salary from that day. In addition, It was an added advantage to my uncle that he was looking for someone who is trustworthy. Therefore it was like a mutual exchange between them.
To recapitulate, for the above-aforementioned traits. It is an advantage to have many members of a family because it improves our energy and quality of our life. Moreover, it helps to search occupation easily even without having experience in the contemporary competitive world.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 366, Rule ID: ACCORDING_TO_ME[1]
Message: This phrase can sound awkward in English. Consider using 'in my opinion' or 'I think'.
Suggestion: In my opinion; I think
...w, I disagree with the above postulate. According to me, it is highly significant and has a myr...
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Line 5, column 368, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...was tough to get employment for him. He didnt have any experience as well. One fine d...
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Line 5, column 574, Rule ID: SAY_TELL[2]
Message: 'Say' cannot be followed by a direct personal object. Did you mean 'told'?
Suggestion: told
...s him very well and meat my brother and said him to join in his own gym as a persona...
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Line 5, column 864, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...looking for someone who is trustworthy. Therefore it was like a mutual exchange between t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, if, look, moreover, so, therefore, well, as to, for instance, i feel, in addition, in fact, in short, in my view, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2336.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 516.0 407.700716846 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.52713178295 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76609204519 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76852192678 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 272.0 212.727598566 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.527131782946 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 773.1 618.680645161 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 24.0 9.59856630824 250% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 34.0 20.6003584229 165% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.8520613271 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 68.7058823529 100.406767564 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.1764705882 20.6045352989 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.70588235294 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.155899856793 0.236089414692 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0396511753547 0.076458572812 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0547302275208 0.0737576698707 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10367547247 0.150856017488 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0900952458712 0.0645574589148 140% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.5 11.7677419355 64% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.4 10.9000537634 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.53 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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