Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Modern day with many kinds of entertainment and game shows. As a result, there are a lot of celebrities such as famous entertainer and athletes from those programs. Those celebrities have a lot of impact on thinking and doing ways of many people. Some people argued that those celebrities are more important with younger people than older people. In my opinion, I absolutely agree with this idea. I believe that celebrities not only important, they sometimes decide the development of young people.
Younger people, especially people in puberty, they often have their own idols. Those idols are who they like very much because of their famous songs, their speech or their eccentric. When people like someone, they will spend a lot of time to look for information about he/she, from lifestyle, how is his/her clothes. Young people will be impact very much from their idol. Even they see their idol like criteria for them to follow and do similar to them. Older people often do not have enough enthusiasm like the young, here I want to talk about biology of period of development of people. Therefore, celebrities have the most important role in the development of young people. For example, there are some football players who are very good at soccer, but they do not have good lifestyle. These people will make young people who like them be influenced very much, they even can have negative action. In general, younger people trend to be depend much on people that they like, so celebrities have very important here.
Additionally, younger people often have a lot of free time that not be controlled by their parent, so they can do everything they want, have more time to look for about their idols. But on the other hand, older people always have a lot of thing to do and worry about, such as their working, their family. Therefore, they do not have much time to care about those celebrities., they just like them. Besides that, older people have more mature thinking, they do not be attractive by status around them easily. In basically, younger people have more chances to be impacted by celebrities.
Some people could say that young people who are taught well will not be impacted much from celebrities. In my opinion, I do not think so, young people is the period of time that their parent more and more control them, they will have even more negative responses.
In conclusion, I want to repeat the role of celebrities in the development of young people. I recommend social should have more requiring for people be seen as celebrities. Celebrities should also understand their role and try to fulfill their self for the future development of their fans.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 231, Rule ID: A_LOT_OF_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun thing seems to be countable; consider using: 'a lot of things'.
Suggestion: a lot of things
...he other hand, older people always have a lot of thing to do and worry about, such as their wo...
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Line 4, column 159, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
... I do not think so, young people is the period of time that their parent more and more control...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, if, look, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, in conclusion, in general, such as, as a result, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2211.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 456.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84868421053 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62105577807 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52153601044 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.412280701754 0.524837075471 79% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 700.2 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.4017519504 48.9658058833 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.0384615385 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5384615385 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.80769230769 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.244286026641 0.236089414692 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.09381736115 0.076458572812 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0562658629812 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163012488531 0.150856017488 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0670355314021 0.0645574589148 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.55 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.08 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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