Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
When it comes to the issue that the opinion of celebrities, are more important to younger people that they are to older people, some people may agree with this idea and give us sound reasons for their beliefs. On the other hand, some other people might disagree and have different opinion. Also, those opponents may have the right to believe in that. I believe that celebrities’ opinions are more influence to the younger people than to the older people because of many reasons. This short essay will demonstrate some points regarding my point of view in the following paragraph:
First of all, in my opinion, it is widely understood that the celebrities’ effectiveness is greatest determinant of teenager’s behavior. Because young people personality highly fluctuated. So, will try to behave like a famous person which they admire must. However, old people passed through different experiences during their life which built their own characters.
Another point why I advocate that the celebrities have great impact on young people’s life is the rapid development of the technology. we live in era of advance technology and young people sucked in to online activities. So, the young people always try to follow the technology by imitating the celebrities whom are use the technology in practical ways. On the other hand, old people prefer traditional ways in their life rather than new things.
Finally, it is a well-established fact that the life today and the parents spend long time in their work. So, the children have less time to spend with their parents and that give the celebrities to be the child’s hero instead of his parents. For instance, the child whom like the football always watches his favorite player’s match in order to be like him.
From what has been discussed above, we can draw a conclusion which says that, people who hold opposite idea may have the right to believe in that, but my opinion and other people opinions are overwhelmingly too much to be ignored.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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... overwhelmingly too much to be ignored.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, may, regarding, so, well, for instance, first of all, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1696.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 333.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09309309309 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27180144563 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89583551688 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.534534534535 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 526.5 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.5096459301 48.9658058833 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.0 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8125 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.875 5.45110844103 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196167794356 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0658390061645 0.076458572812 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0857490696957 0.0737576698707 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102027423637 0.150856017488 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0979326588037 0.0645574589148 152% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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