Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, celebrities are very popular in the society and would be no exaggeration of fact if I said that many people pay attention to every detail of famous people life more than they pay for themselves. But, a matter of debate, a controversial one, is that whether younger people are more concern about the celebrities or not. I do believe that teenagers pay more attention to the famous people' life on the ground that they are involved in social networks more than matures are, teenagers need role model to follow in their life, and also they dream more than their parents.
To begin with, it is crystal clear that by arrival of the social networks many aspects of people life has been changed. One of these facets is the activity of celebrities in these channels and the people who are following them. Since the younger people are more active in these kind of communication applications, they are more affected by famous people.
Second, people need a role model in their life to pursue in youth. As a result, teens seek someone that they can use as a successful person who they want to be like them. According to a survey conducted on the some teenagers, majority of them need to have role model and most of them choose their hero from among the famous celebrities.
Lastly, children and teenagers often dream instead of being realistic. That being so, they follow famous people, for example actors, because they can achieve those dreams and make those visions more realistic for the young people. For example, being a hero that can save the whole world is something which can turn real in movies that is delightful for young people. Consequently, teenagers love the actors who realize their dreams.
All in all, I do believe that celebrities have a more effect on the life of the youns rather than adults because of teenagers are more attended in social networks, want to live in dreams, and need a hero in their life. We can observe that many young people copy the famous people behaviors and styles.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, if, lastly, second, so, for example, kind of, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1663.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 351.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.73789173789 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32839392791 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44387657022 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.478632478632 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 527.4 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.5084702898 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.866666667 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.46666666667 5.45110844103 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220923167501 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0786348938172 0.076458572812 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0618284142061 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129251029811 0.150856017488 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.049669123804 0.0645574589148 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.51 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.57 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.002688172 180% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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