Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It goes without saying that celebrities play an important role in each society. People usually pay more attention to quotes and behavior of famous people than others. Now, the question is whether the opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people. I definitely agree with this statement. I will elaborate on my idea in the following reasons.
First, younger people and especially teenagers are highly interested in following the stories of celebrities. Even the usual events in daily life of these famous people are attractive to them. For example, many years ago, when I was a middle school student, Ahmadreza Abedzade was the goalkeeper of Iran National Football Team. He was not only a hero for me but also many of my classmates love his style and his high confidence during playing football. Most teenagers had his picture in their bags or notebooks. When someone is so attractive for younger people, how can we expect he has few effects on his enthusiasts.
Second, younger people are more emotional than elderlies. The older we get, the wiser we are. When we have lower experience, we need to rely on people who are inspiring for us. One type of these impressive people is celebrities. I remember that my little sister used to watch TV from a short distance. When my parents told her keep a regular distance from the TV because it can hurt your eyes, she refused and sometimes even got nearer to it. But, after a while, I saw that she started to be more cautious about her eyes. When I asked about the reason for her new manner, she replied one of her favorite actresses asked the TV viewers to keep a minimum distance of 3 meters from the TV.
In conclusion, although celebrities impressing us throughout our lives, their influences change over time. While youth get more affected by their behavior and opinions, older people are more experienced and as a result, do not accept any opinion except it matches their beliefs. Regarding the priority of celebrities’ opinions and behaviors for young people, they should try to exhibit their best to public views.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, regarding, second, so, thus, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1800.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 368.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89130434783 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70470407796 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.603260869565 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 568.8 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.0896017491 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.8181818182 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7272727273 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.81818181818 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.284352341484 0.236089414692 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0810637650043 0.076458572812 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104249444774 0.0737576698707 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179767277884 0.150856017488 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.138769172374 0.0645574589148 215% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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