Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Today, we are encountered with various hobbies and entertainments that technology advances have brought us. We are so soaked in computers, internet, mobile phones, social networks and other stuff that sometimes forget to do our daily chores. Although these inventions cause promotions in our life, I believe that a lot of people aren’t conscious of the side effects of these bad habits. Besides technology advances, there are other reasons that have caused people to spend too much time on personal enjoyment rather than doing things they are expected to do. In what follows, I will elaborate on my point of view.
As I mentioned above, one the reasons for people doing things that they like more, is the technological achievements. New inventions in electronic devices such as computers, laptops and mobile phones along with emerging of communication technologies such as internet and wireless have produced a good opportunity for people to spend their time on browsing, chatting, and doing other kinds of their favorite activities. Through the internet and cable TVs, watching favorite movies are more convenient than every other time. They can easily search what they are looking for, and sit relax in their home and watch the movie on their TVs or laptops. Therefore, one of the main reasons supporting my viewpoint is easy access to modern technological inventions.
The second reason that makes people spend more time on their favorites, as the first reason, is derived from technology. Nowadays, people don’t need to spend as much time as they needed to spend in the past. For example, one hundred years ago, there wasn’t washing machines or dishwashers. As a result, people had to do dishes or wash their clothes by hand. Doing these chores caused they didn’t have enough time to spend on their personal enjoyments. But, in the current era, machines and computers do a lot of work instead of mankind. Thus, humans have more time to spend for themselves.
There are also other reasons, such as social changes and economic thrives, but there isn’t enough time to illustrate them.
Considering proposed reasons, it is not a surprising statement that people spend more time on their favorites than every other time. In fact, changes in our community and the environment that we live in, have brought more time for us to do our favorite stuff.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: ALSO_OTHER[1]
Message: Use simply 'there are other' or 'there are also'
Suggestion: There are other; There are also
...ave more time to spend for themselves. There are also other reasons, such as social changes and eco...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, look, second, so, therefore, thus, for example, in fact, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1995.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 389.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12853470437 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72049645668 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.526992287918 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 619.2 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.1188810519 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.75 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.45 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.4 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.352394677994 0.236089414692 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114710301956 0.076458572812 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.11815470468 0.0737576698707 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.191516567518 0.150856017488 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.09896934587 0.0645574589148 153% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25 Out of 30
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