Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
As human beings, we do like to get informed about what happened around us. There are various motivations that make events attractive for us, such as improving our knowledge and learning from other’s experiences. Now, the question is whether the events happening around the world is important even if it is unlikely that they will affect our daily life. I definitely agree with the statement and elaborate on my idea through the following reasons.
First, all events, especially those that have wider effects, have a lesson for everyone. When we see an event, we can learn a lot about the situation and the event consequences. For example, several years ago, an earthquake happened in the city of Bam and unfortunately, we lost more than forty thousand people in that incident. Although, after the event, all Iranians and even people from other countries tried to do their best to reduce its impacts on injured people, its subsequences could be much less if the government would pay more control on the constructions. In addition to the government, the event had lessons for each individual. For example, when I saw that how dangerous could be an earthquake, I convinced my family to move to a safer part of our city and buy a stronger apartment. Therefore, while the Bam’s earthquake didn’t have a direct effect in my life, but I learned how to be prepared before confront with such a scary incident.
Second, besides the event itself, we can learn a lot about the way that people respond to the event. Obviously, we don’t have enough time to experience every situation and try different types of response. As a result, we need to learn from others experience. One of my relatives had an ordinary life. He lived in his own apartment with his family. One day he decided to invest all of his money on gold. His family was against his decision, but he sold their house and bought a lot of gold. After that, the gold price that had a growth every day, changed its pattern and took a descending route. It goes without saying that the man lost a significant part of his wealth in that event. In this example, the man made a wrong decision to the event of gold price increment.
In conclusion, events have a lot for us even if they seem don’t have a direct relevance to our life. We can learn many things from events that may not find them in books or universities. Along with the events, the people reactions to the events are also valuable for us. If we don’t learn from other’s experience, others may learn from our experience.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, may, second, so, therefore, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2124.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 446.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76233183857 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5955099915 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72412943451 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522421524664 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 666.0 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.8273557437 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.96 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.84 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.08 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.88709677419 266% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.175118339916 0.236089414692 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0551342328077 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.07969730754 0.0737576698707 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14256923911 0.150856017488 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.125834321195 0.0645574589148 195% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.03 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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