Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In modern societies the celebrities influence the people in many different ways. personaly, I believe famous actors and artists have more impacat on the younger people. I feel this way for for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, the appearance is more important factor in youth. younger people like to wear fancy clothes in order to look good in front of other people, therefor they spend more money to buy clothes used by the celebrities. my personal experience is a compelling example of this. ten years ago when I entered college I was so worried about my appearance in the campus, as a result I spent a lot time caring about myself to look good. moreover, I spent a lot on clothes and shoes without thinking about saving money. but as the time passed I realized appearance is not as important as I thought.
Secondly, adults get involved with their career and their tasks in the daily life. as a person gets older he becomes wisers and understands being famous people do not necessarily have a prosperous life. for instance, there are a lot of celebrities who does not have a healthy life. an athletes my be the first in his field, but it does not mean he is a good example in the other aspects of life. as any individual gets older, he has less attitudes toward the celebrities.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that celebrities have more effects on younger people than the older people. this is because appearance is more important to younger people and because older people are wiser in some ways.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, look, moreover, second, secondly, so, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 52.1666666667 63% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1279.0 1977.66487455 65% => OK
No of words: 275.0 407.700716846 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.65090909091 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07223819929 4.48103885553 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59901061913 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 212.727598566 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.541818181818 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 412.2 618.680645161 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.9609111562 48.9658058833 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 79.9375 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1875 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.25 5.45110844103 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 5.5376344086 289% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.225075309501 0.236089414692 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.071344773591 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0680112671353 0.0737576698707 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140590516364 0.150856017488 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0694961640225 0.0645574589148 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 11.7677419355 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.39 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.58 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 86.8835125448 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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