Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In this era, the world has become like vilage, which all the people are connected to each other. Personally, I believe people from all the nations should listen to international news even if it does not affect their life. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, the human beings should not be indifferent about what happens to their kind in foreign countries. All the people are related to each other, as we know we are descendants of Adam and Havva, therefore they should help each other. For instance, there is always conflicts in poor and developing countries. If the governments of these countries know the world do not care about how the people are treated, they are more likely to be in danger. Yemen is good example of this, we know there is conflicts in that country for six years and the people have a lot of difficulties in their daily life. So it is our duty to watch our them and ask our president and foreign minister to help the country to achieve peace.
Secondly, there is some chance that what is happening far across world, someday happens in our society too. There is always some cycles in the chain of events, which is all the same in history. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. For example, in 1979 a revolution happened in Iran. The people were complaining about the King and believed the government is not capable of managing the resources of the country. What's more, the king was not elected by the people, but the people wanted democracy. Therefore the complaints lead to a revolution. However, if the foreign countries cared about the Iranian people the bloodshed of king during the revolution could be decreased.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that people should be aware of what is happening across the world. This is because all the people are related to each other, and because it is likely for them to experience the same event.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, all the same, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1606.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 344.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.66860465116 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30665032142 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51759626789 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.488372093023 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 499.5 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.6886894717 48.9658058833 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.5263157895 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1052631579 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.05263157895 5.45110844103 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.126629151761 0.236089414692 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0401368183115 0.076458572812 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0348767034452 0.0737576698707 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0798721145266 0.150856017488 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0210171006592 0.0645574589148 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.51 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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