Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In our everyday life we see different brands and products are getting endorsed by the celebrities. When I was a little boy, I bought a bottle of shampoo just because it provided two free radium stickers of my favourite movie star, though my parents prohibited me. That is how powerful the impact of a celebrity emdorsement can be. The statement here is that young people get more influenced by the opinions of celebrities than the older people and I agree with this position.
To begin with, young people are very easy to have impression upon. As they admire the celebrities, they try to follow their lifestyle as closely as possible. Thus, the opinions of the celebrities have far greater impact on them. It is a very common scenario that a product getting adopted by a young person just because his idol uses it. One incident of my firend is a very compelling example for me. One of my friend was an avid fan of a movie star. The movie star, who was a vegan, said in an interview that he uses certain slimming pills to stay in shape. He might have said it for promotional purpose, but my friend become very obessed. So, he became vegan and started taking the slimming pills. It caused a sharp decline in his health and later he was needed to be hospitalized from the combined adverse effect of the diet change and that medicine. He used the medicine without taking any opinion from the doctors just because his idol uses it, which put his life in risk. That is how strong the influence of celebrities can be on the young fledgling minds.
Moreover, the younger people lack in experience which the older people does not. It might sound ironic, but the older people have gone through that young period and understand better about the reality. It is very common that celebrities do and say things to stay in the spotlight. While the experienced older people can identify these ploys very easily, it can very harder for the young minds. For example, one of my friend who was a cyclist, has an athlet as idol who was banned for using performance enhancing drugs. That athlet later said that it was his right to use drugs because to him competitions are like war and winning it anyhow is what matters. This inspired my firend to start performance enhancing drugs. Eventually, he got caught and was banned for life from cycling. Even though he knew the dangers, he couldn't resist the influence of his idol.
So, in light of the discussion above and from the incidents I have seen in my life, I stand by my opinion that the celebrities have more influence over the younger generation than they have on the older people.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 820, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
...ng. Even though he knew the dangers, he couldnt resist the influence of his idol. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, moreover, so, thus, while, for example, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2162.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 467.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.6295503212 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64867537961 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47509315767 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.488222698073 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 682.2 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.2845350148 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.1538461538 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9615384615 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.38461538462 5.45110844103 44% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.125735945496 0.236089414692 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0375391649321 0.076458572812 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0614204223939 0.0737576698707 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0980447973248 0.150856017488 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0357848745398 0.0645574589148 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 11.7677419355 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.28 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.56 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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