Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
With the recent dramatic advance of technology, notably the internet and televisions, people hear more and more about the celebrities everywhere, in commercials, in social medias and even in the news. A lot of companies and political groups try to deliver their purposes subtly, via celebrities in commercials for instance. Most, if not all, of young people get influenced more by celebrities and athletes than older people do. This is mostly because the younger are in their crucial ages, and also, are not mature enough.
To begin with, young children, mostly between the age of ten to eighteen, are living their most important period of their life and carry a little influence, from most of the people. To illustrate, the younger, always look for role models in a wide spectrum, from super rich people, to humans with superpowers in movies. In fact, those who have these certain criteria, are already the younger's favorite. As a result, they find these kind of people, more appealing than others, which will result in unconscious influence in them. For example, we all have heard about the well known popular movie, spider man; this movie, had a large effect on children when it released in cinemas, children even tried to copy the moves of spider man and started to believe that whenever, a specific spider, bites them, they will gain superpowers, just like the spider man did.
Moreover, the younger are not mature enough to discern good and bad people and get influenced by celebrities easily. It is crystal clear that, The younger, in comparison to elders, didn't enter the society independently, they probably grew in comfortable houses with their parents and have no clue about the people and their goals, who they may face later, in life. to clarify, most of the companies, pay celebrities to advertise about a few goods, because they know that influence, will have their effect on the younger the most, unlike adults, who know that these kinds of ads are simply aimed to deliver a subtle meaning, and influence are just getting paid to advertise. Thus, since the younger have little experience, in comparison to their parents for example, and have one dimensional thinking, are an easy target for the influence of celebrities.
All in all, these days, with the help of widespread technology, teenagers, have become an easy target of the celebrities. Mostly because they are living their crucial ages, and are not experienced enough, to understand the secret goals of some celebrities.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'these kinds'?
Suggestion: this kind; these kinds
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Suggestion: didn't
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Suggestion: To
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, look, may, moreover, so, thus, well, for example, for instance, in fact, kind of, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2095.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 415.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04819277108 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51348521516 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63982034869 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522891566265 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 647.1 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 17.0 4.94265232975 344% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 73.5444234611 48.9658058833 150% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.666666667 100.406767564 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.6666666667 20.6045352989 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.86666666667 5.45110844103 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.181559962528 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0696266570441 0.076458572812 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0498724507829 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116324614242 0.150856017488 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.028547561205 0.0645574589148 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 11.7677419355 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 58.1214874552 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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