Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
To achieve successful development of a country, a government should spend more money on young children’s education rather than on universities
One of the most noteworthy aspects of a development is the people who make a country progressive. If the people do not educate well, not only doesn’t achieve development, but also the country will deteriorate. In order to attain perfect progression, there are lots of ways to educate members of society. In my view spending money on young children’s education, is much more important to access this achievement for two main reasons.
First and paramount importance reason could be mentioned is that children are more impressible than juvenile and older people. When you teach a child to do something or do not, you need just one reasonable argument to say, and then you can see the effect. As an explicit example I can remember my childhood when my father said to me, if you could not do a particular work in a right way, you would better not to do it. This advice makes me more enthusiastic about my effort to do my work in the best way that I can forever. Because of this reason, I presume teaching young children is more effective than older ones.
The second reason can be cited is that a low percentage of students who finish high school, getting along study and introducing to universities. Society is a mixture of the people, not professional one, nor high educated one, but of the all people lives in it. If the government spends more money on universities, it would omit lots of people who can make more development and reach to it faster. For instance in my country, Iran, administration spends a huge budget on universities every year, although, statistics show progress not in academic society, nor in the industry. As a result, spending money on more people makes development more accessible.
In summary, spending more money to educate children would be more effective in order to achieve successive development; by contrast, some may oppose that. Not only will build children’s characteristic more efficient but also it will cover more people. To get a successful and modern country, governments should adopt more budgets on under-graduated schools.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 373, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a right way" with adverb for "right"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
..., if you could not do a particular work in a right way, you would better not to do it. This ad...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, so, then, thus, well, for instance, in summary, as a result, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1741.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 350.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97428571429 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02725173404 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.54 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 556.2 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 26.6838468303 48.9658058833 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 102.411764706 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5882352941 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.23529411765 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.349307621953 0.236089414692 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112316858367 0.076458572812 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0681097020298 0.0737576698707 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.213305194404 0.150856017488 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0486224936394 0.0645574589148 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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