Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
To improve the quality of education, universities should spend more money on salaries for university professors.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Increasing the quality of education attracts a great deal of attention dealing with different approaches. Some people belives that increasing the salaries of professors will surprisingly increase the effectiveness of education at universities, however, others disagree. In my own perspective, I do believe that professors must be paid more if we expect to improve our education system. The following paragraphs elaborate this idea through two different reasons.
First, if our professors are paid well, they will be more concentrated on their job. In fact, most of the people select their career based on its salary, therefore, if the job provide the desired money, the people will be satisfied and feel perfect. Also, there is a relation between the money that you gave from anything and the effort that you make to do it more perfectly. My fathers life is a good exmple of this claim. He is now the professor of the best university in China, however he suffers myriad difficaulties to reach this postion. He had tough at univerity of Malaya 20 years ago. At those time he did not get good money and had some problems in providing the mere substenece for his family. Therefore, he was always angry about his job because he believed that there must be a ballance between the effort that you make for a job and the consequence that it gives to your life. Finally he started doing some irrelevent types of work like teaching long ours in private school. Consequently, he had less enery for his university studets and he did not do his best for them. As he said to me, on thoese days he might destroyed the life of their sudents by the his insufficient focus on teaching.
Second, professors will be motivated to propese inivations in order to solve the current problems of the education system. In other words, during many years managers, teachers, and professors decised new approaches for the educations systems. In this way, some perfect methos was invented and as a result, we now have a relatively sufficient ways of teaching. If we pay extra money to proffessors, they will thinks that they are an inherent part of this system. Therefore, they will be motivated to suggest some new methods. My math professors' life is a compeling example of this point. He was teaching for Oxford university for a long time. As he said, he was in a dynamic situation and they paid extra money if they provide some new methos in teaching. In this regarad, they were always highly motivated to think beyond the ordinary problems. This types of managements in Oxford university will usually lead to strengthen its education systems and solve its problem. My professors tells me if the mind of a man in not full of some primarily needs, he or she can show thies ingeniuty.
In sum, above all aforementioned explanation, it is obvious that I do believe that more money must be paid to university professors if we want to increase the successfulness of our education.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, finally, first, however, if, second, so, then, therefore, well, in fact, as a result, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 77.0 43.0788530466 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2454.0 1977.66487455 124% => OK
No of words: 506.0 407.700716846 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84980237154 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7428307748 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81581926482 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.49209486166 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 778.5 618.680645161 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.075202558 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.8888888889 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7407407407 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.44444444444 5.45110844103 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.140979722398 0.236089414692 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0413148296791 0.076458572812 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0442241316163 0.0737576698707 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100352088141 0.150856017488 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0308421733569 0.0645574589148 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.85 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 86.8835125448 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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