Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The communities played a significent role in one's life in the past. Whether young people still are willing to do something to help their communities raises a debate nowadays. A minority of people still assert that the youngsters spend enough time doing community work while I hold that they pay less attention to the communities.
First, the development of technologies and the coming of Internet cause many young people to spend less time helping the communities. Nowadays, the young are able to do almost anything with the access to Internet. They can enroll in an online course to learn something that they are intersted in, they can make friend with many different people who share the hobbies with the help of Facebook, and they can even discuss with the professors about an realtive challenge. Since the online world is so amazing and attractive, the young people may not need to participate in the community work to make friends and socialize with others. However, in the past, for the lack of chances to know people far away from the home, people tend to do some community work, and make friend with others who also live in this community at the same time.
Second, the young nowadays are more willing to participate in something beneficial instead of activities that are useless. With the living pace being more and more fast, people usually want to achieve some accomplishment rapidly, and they may believe that they need to be dedicated to making efforts to improve themselves and they shouldn't wate any time in the meaningless thing like helping their communities. You can imagine that after seeing so many examples who can become succesful or rich over only one night, it's completely possible for the youngsters to be deeply impacted. This is a time that many people can succeed, but this is also a time that many people may lose the patience.
Admittedly, the young people nowadays are educated better than their parents, and they may know that helping their communities is a good choice because the life quality of all the people may be improved. However, I still hold that the impact from the life pace of the whole society in this era plays a more important role in the growth processes of the young people.
In brief, I advance the claim that with the development of the Internet and the impact from the rapid life pace, the youngsters tend to spend less time in their communities.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...ommunities played a significent role in ones life in the past. Whether young people ...
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Line 1, column 69, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whether” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...nificent role in ones life in the past. Whether young people still are willing to do so...
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Line 3, column 324, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...intersted in, they can make friend with many different people who share the hobbies with the h...
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Line 3, column 447, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
... even discuss with the professors about an realtive challenge. Since the online wo...
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Line 5, column 332, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: shouldn't
... efforts to improve themselves and they shouldnt wate any time in the meaningless thing ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, second, so, still, while, in brief
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2003.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 413.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84987893462 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50803742585 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53771509225 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.457627118644 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 627.3 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.7576567115 48.9658058833 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.533333333 100.406767564 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.5333333333 20.6045352989 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.66666666667 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.25544963092 0.236089414692 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.099942736656 0.076458572812 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0544686541278 0.0737576698707 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15254545558 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0393630377429 0.0645574589148 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 11.7677419355 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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