At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.
The given claim is correct in addressing the importance of sports and social activities as an indispensable part of college life, but it is indefensible when uplifting sports and social life to the same height of classes and libraries, and even less considerate when suggesting equal financial support for the two.
Admittedly, sports and social activities entail undeniable significance in tertiary education. Quite superficially, college students need places to exercise their body and hold social life. A healthy and sociable graduate would be preferred to a gauche nerd by potential employers. In more philosophical terms, athleticism and sociability are partially, apart from academia, the purpose of modern college education. These qualities are reasonable expectations college students are supposed to fulfill on campus.
However, the significance of sports and social activities cannot challenge the dominant position of classes and libraries. Dating back to their origin, universities have always been a gathering place of the best intellectual minds – a definition that did not change with the vicissitudes of time. To realize the academic role of a college, classes and libraries are a must. Take a look at the best universities in the world – Harvard, Yale, Cambridge, Oxford – each and every one of them hold strong prestige in their strengths of academic research and the capabilities to cultivate the young generation. While encourage their students to socialize and exercise, none of them has turned themselves into a sports school or a social club.
The speaker is being even more simplistic appealing equal financial support for the two. To a university, teaching facilities are costly: a library building might cost millions of dollars already, not to mention the library system, the books and references, the personnel; classrooms are expensive to decorate and the teachers are expensive to hire, taking another bulk of the school budget. In contrast, a college normally does not need fancy sports ground to hold an Olympic; neither does it need extravagant social clubs to open a parade. Therefore, sports and social activities should not be given the same share in the school budget as classes and libraries, even when we admit their importance.
In sum, the speaker has made a two-fold mistake. His claim rests firstly on a shaking assumption that sports and social life are as important as classes and libraries in higher education, and secondly lacks economic savvy in assuming the two categories should are the same in costs. Therefore, my position to this claim is full disagreement.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 448, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'expectations'' or 'expectation's'?
Suggestion: expectations'; expectation's
...ucation. These qualities are reasonable expectations college students are supposed to fulfil...
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Line 5, column 462, Rule ID: EACH_AND_EVERY[1]
Message: Consider using 'each one'.
Suggestion: each one
...ld – Harvard, Yale, Cambridge, Oxford – each and every one of them hold strong prestige in their s...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, apart from, in contrast
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 43.0788530466 39% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2218.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 413.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.37046004843 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50803742585 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9560426358 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53995157385 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 698.4 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 76.8918793574 48.9658058833 157% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.222222222 100.406767564 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9444444444 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.72222222222 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.323160054141 0.236089414692 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0859478057937 0.076458572812 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0791078547251 0.0737576698707 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172035671491 0.150856017488 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0640044517094 0.0645574589148 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 11.7677419355 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 58.1214874552 70% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 10.1575268817 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 10.9000537634 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.01 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 86.8835125448 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.002688172 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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