Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Whether should children choose jobs that are similar to parents causes a debate nowadays. A minority of people are convinced that children shouldn't choose the same jobs because a totally different job can give them more colorful life. I, however, believe that choosing the similar job is better.
Firstly, children can get better career education from their parents if they choose a similar job. Through working in one area for several decades, parents usually know many significant things that need to be remembered about their jobs, like what's the most important capability to do the job greatly, how to improve yourselves faster, and how to deal with your agency properly. For example, my brother, Tom, chose to be a lawyer, the same job as his father, after graduating from the university. After determining the job, his father started to talk with him about everything he knew after going home. Through the communication, Tom prepared a lot for his first work, and he even made a good career plan. Finally, Tom did well in his job and was admired by the boss.
Secondly, choosing a similar job also means that children can take advantage of the social circle of their parents. It is common knowledge that social circle is of great importance in the career, and by choosing the same job with their parents, children can meet many people who can help them with their careers without any cost. Parents have established it and children just need to join the social circle. The researchers in the China Academy of Social Science have conducted a survey recently, and according to the report, nearly 73.3 percent of people agree that social circle, instead of the capability, is the most essential thing that is beneficial to the career.
Of course, I know that some people hold that choosing different jobs is more benefitial because doing what the parents have done is really boring, and it's more likely that children's life are enriched providing they choose different jobs. Yet I believe, personally, that with the help form parents, children have more chances to perform better in the career and the life won't be boring when you are a member of the top 10 percent of any job since what you deal with everyday at that time are definitly challengous and difficult.
In brief, I may reasonably advance the claim that children should choose jobs that are similar to their parents' because they can get better education and useful social circle without any cost.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, firstly, however, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, well, for example, in brief, of course
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2058.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 418.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92344497608 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52162009685 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44045406223 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507177033493 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 630.9 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 77.524995969 48.9658058833 158% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.625 100.406767564 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.125 20.6045352989 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.3125 5.45110844103 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.433260030563 0.236089414692 184% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.171929591173 0.076458572812 225% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0975708980475 0.0737576698707 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.269851758395 0.150856017488 179% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0613187737082 0.0645574589148 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 11.7677419355 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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