Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
I totally agree with the statement that young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities, and the reasons are as below.
Firstly, in the contemporary society, young people own less time after their daily work because of the overtime working mechanism, and even during the weekend, most of them probably choose to have a long and deep sleeping rather than go outside. Take my brother for example, he graduated since ten months ago and employed by an IT company, which refer to work begin 9:00 am to 9:00 pm from Monday to Saturday. Under this circumstance, he scattered most of his energy to engage in work place and had only tiny of times to entertain himself, not to mention that pay attention to what news occurred in his community.
What's more, youngsters always possess some grand dreams so that they have to spend their spare time studying new and comprehensive skills, which distract them from their local communities as well. As they thought, the society wouldn't be broken down or weaken merely because without their supporting , so why should they focus on those issues which are unable to affect their life? As a result, youngsters would like to improve themselves by attending extra courses in order to win in fierce competitions.
Admittedly, elder are also busy sometimes and they still participate in the local activities. so, the ignorance of communities according to youngsters behaviors shows the sobering reason that the lacking of collaborative circumstance among the society. A survey conducted by experts of Peking University reveals that over 78 percent of people whose ages from 19 to 25 shows less interesting on local events and knows little about current policies as well.
In a nutshell, young people nowadays do not have enough time to helping their communities because of the heavy burden from companies, and even they have spare times, they would prefer to learn new skills since the rigorous working situation in contemporary society.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: an; IT
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Message: Did you mean 'companies'?
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...s as well. As they thought, the society wouldnt be broken down or weaken merely because...
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Message: The adverb 'sometimes' is usually put before the verb 'busy'.
Suggestion: sometimes busy
...etitions. Admittedly, elder are also busy sometimes and they still participate in the local...
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...ll participate in the local activities. so, the ignorance of communities according...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, so, still, well, for example, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 15.1003584229 26% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1669.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 329.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07294832827 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66449808518 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.617021276596 0.524837075471 118% => OK
syllable_count: 511.2 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.6003584229 53% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 48.1876497329 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 151.727272727 100.406767564 151% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.9090909091 20.6045352989 145% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.09090909091 5.45110844103 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221133176143 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0939786633327 0.076458572812 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.167268295433 0.0737576698707 227% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184638050409 0.150856017488 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.213841444828 0.0645574589148 331% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.4 11.7677419355 148% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.72 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.01 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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