Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Young people should try several different jobs before
they take a long term career.
Throughout history, humans have been perpetually concerned about the routes to success. As the contemporary world which we live in has emerged, these ways have become ambiguous gradually. One of the issues regarding this matter is finding an appropriate job. The controversial question which made heated debates among specialists is whether or not young people should try different positions prior to taking a long term one. Some people might find it confusing, but I firmly believe that young people tend to have several jobs in their early years of working, will face moderate problems in their long term job. There are numerous reasons to substantiate this viewpoint, two of which I will illuminate in the following paragraphs.
First and foremost, no one can cast a shadow of doubt on the importance of experience in doing a task. When a person decides to work in different posts, not only he will learn a vast majority of skills, but also he will get amazed by finding different approaches to solve a single problem when he works with different kinds of people. Take a personal experience as an example; back in college, I used to work in a library. Since there were insufficient staff working there, I had to deal with a roller coaster of problems, which included from electrical cut downs in the building to fixing the tables. There is no doubt that by the time I quitted the job, I had a wide range of abilities. Besides, I had a colleague there who taught me so much about how to behave when things get foggy.
The second noteworthy point to mention is that if young people try several jobs, they can find their suitable long term job easily. A recent study conducted in my country showed that people who worked in different tasks wouldn’t get frustrated by the hardships they come across during their long term job. This study meticulously depicts the significant role of trying toward reaching success. To put it differently, the more jobs someone tries, the more chance of promotion he gets. These people tend to work harder than others in a work environment. I remember my father always told me not to give up easily and try once more after a failure. Had I not been put that in my mind, I wouldn’t be successful in my life the way I am now.
To encapsulate, I cling to the idea that says it is beneficial for young people to try several jobs before entering a long term one. Nevertheless, that was a story in a nutshell. Trying different things in life needs concentration and hard work. All in all, wouldn’t it be more satisfying for each of us, if we could change our jobs as frequently as we desire? I think it is a tough question to answer.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 334, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...ade heated debates among specialists is whether or not young people should try different posit...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, nevertheless, regarding, second, so, i think, no doubt
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2209.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 471.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.69002123142 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65859790218 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74770373439 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 258.0 212.727598566 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.547770700637 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 684.0 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.3981673189 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.0416666667 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.625 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.54166666667 5.45110844103 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.282785177741 0.236089414692 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0678811806201 0.076458572812 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.082361970493 0.0737576698707 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168910959036 0.150856017488 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0546100868485 0.0645574589148 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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