Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, in many societies, adults and even politicians believe that young people do not play an important role in decision making for the future of countries. In my opinion, it is a crucial fact never to underestimate youngsters' impact on society's decisions. I think this way because of two reasons, which I will explain in the following essay.
First of all, it is young people's responsibility to develop their countries and societies in the future. Therefore, if they decide not to take their responsibilities and not be dependable adults in their communities in the future, the countries will not advance. Consequently, youngsters are the future's hope of society, and without them fulfilling the goals of society cannot be possible. For instance, my home country identified as a brain drain country in the world because the majority of the young prefer to immigrant to other countries and study or employ there due to hopelessness among them in having a good future in their country. As a result, in recent years, the rate of development decreased dramatically. If young people decided to stay in their country instead of immigrating and not taking responsibility, my country would advance more lately.
Secondly, the youngsters are more enthusiastic than older people to conquer with bad rules of society. That is, they would like to make changes while older adults prefer to have a stable situation without any modifications. As all improvements occur because of willing to change, young people are more prone to rise against inaccurate laws, plans, and policies. For example, in my country, women did not have the right to go to the stadiums and watch men's football matches. However, recently, some young women activists have decided to oppose this rule, and they sacrificed a lot to achieve their rights. As a result, the Fifa made our government let women get into the stadiums. Therefore, without young women activists, society could not overcome the government's strength to change this unfair rule.
In conclusion, I believe that youngsters have a significant effect on decisions about their society's future because they are responsible for the development of their country moreover they are more keen to change unreasonable laws and policies.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 754, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'governments'' or 'government's'?
Suggestion: governments'; government's
...tivists, society could not overcome the governments strength to change this unfair rule. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, as a result, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1906.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 365.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22191780822 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9461495779 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.550684931507 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 598.5 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.4198763842 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.117647059 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4705882353 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.6470588235 5.45110844103 195% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.145454056621 0.236089414692 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0493274234053 0.076458572812 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0383642622628 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0980339966935 0.150856017488 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0267525000077 0.0645574589148 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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