Do you agree or disagree the following? Television advertising directed towards young children (2-5 years old) should not be allowed.
Did the advertisement in the television influence kids, this is a big debate . Some people believe that this
will misleads the kids and parents but some folks say this will give a good entertainment to the kids. There are
several reasons why I believe that this types of ads should stopped and these will be the focus of my essay.
First reason is, this will burden parents. If the kids get convinced the product they want to buy it. For example,
my son always want to go to mac donald's because of the happy meals. He don't want to eat the food but he want to get the
toys. Whenever I go outside he insisted to by this if I didn't then he will cry as much he can. Some parents says they
are happy because they think that there kid is watching things seriously. However, these companies utilizes this kids and
they are making money and this is not good. Therefore, these type of advertisement will give more financial costs to
the parents.
Second reason is, some of the kids advertisements they will try to imitate and can leads to catastrophe. For instance
there was a advertisement for spider man dress. The add shows that the kid dressed and flying . This made the perception
that when they put this dress we can do the same way . If somebody do that it wont good for them. There are
several incidents happen in the whole world because kids don't know the consequences. Some people mention that advertisement
for the kids are very funny and some
people may enjoy this also. Nevertheless, this can leads to some unwanted situations. As a result the advertisements like
this should be controlled.
In conclusion, the advertisement for kids aged 2-5 will financially burden the parents and can leads to unwanted
problems and governments should control this effectively.
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... can leads to some unwanted situations. As a result the advertisements like this ...
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...nts like this should be controlled. In conclusion, the advertisement for kid...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, nevertheless, second, so, then, therefore, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 52.1666666667 44% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1491.0 1977.66487455 75% => OK
No of words: 312.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77884615385 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20279927342 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66166197036 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 212.727598566 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.503205128205 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 443.7 618.680645161 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.3783147963 48.9658058833 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 71.0 100.406767564 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.8571428571 20.6045352989 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.28571428571 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 17.0 4.53405017921 375% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 26.0 5.5376344086 470% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0735898320859 0.236089414692 31% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0305011384053 0.076458572812 40% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0424032260982 0.0737576698707 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.036337155036 0.150856017488 24% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0380086092269 0.0645574589148 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.5 11.7677419355 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 58.1214874552 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.1575268817 63% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.85 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.76 8.01818996416 84% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 86.8835125448 55% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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