tpo 26
The lecture and the reading passage both discussing about a 2200 years old clay jar contained with a copper cylinder surrounded with iron rod which is excavated in Egypt. The reading passage states that it was not used as batteries because there is no evidence for the usage of cells on that time, the lecture, however, argues this saying that the reasons given in the text are not convincing.
First of all, the reading states that if the jar was used as a battery then it should consist of conducting materials such as wires. The lecture counters this point stating that the pot was discovered by local people not the trained archaeologist. IN addition to that she points out that these lay people who found may over look these and throw away the wires.
secondly, the article makes an argument that cylinder was found near an ancient city Seleucia which used these for holding scrolls of the sacred texts. She agrees this, saying that it may be used to present the scrolls, she however, claims that it can be adapted later for other purpose.
Finally, the text argues that, if they did not have any appliance the battery alone is useless. The lecture refutes this saying that they may be used these for healing as modern medicine do. She gives examples of modern medicine uses electric current for pain relief.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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The lecture and the reading passage both...
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...d with a copper cylinder surrounded with iron rod which is excavated in Egypt. T...
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...ells on that time, the lecture, however, argues this saying that the reasons give...
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...iven in the text are not convincing. First of all, the reading states that if...
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...ints out that these lay people who found may over look these and throw away the w...
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...look these and throw away the wires. secondly, the article makes an argument ...
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...k these and throw away the wires. secondly, the article makes an argument that cyl...
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... be adapted later for other purpose. Finally, the text argues that, if they d...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, then, in addition, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.4613686534 105% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 5.04856512141 99% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 7.30242825607 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 12.0772626932 124% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 22.412803532 134% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 17.0 30.3222958057 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1095.0 1373.03311258 80% => OK
No of words: 230.0 270.72406181 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76086956522 5.08290768461 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.89432290496 4.04702891845 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.24412275879 2.5805825403 87% => OK
Unique words: 134.0 145.348785872 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.582608695652 0.540411800872 108% => OK
syllable_count: 333.9 419.366225166 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 13.0662251656 77% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 21.2450331126 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.9638865344 49.2860985944 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.5 110.228320801 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 21.698381199 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.2 7.06452816374 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 4.19205298013 191% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 4.33554083885 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0673562708907 0.272083759551 25% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0292612583477 0.0996497079465 29% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0167925301277 0.0662205650399 25% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0429375589795 0.162205337803 26% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0159443137558 0.0443174109184 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.3589403974 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 53.8541721854 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.0289183223 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 12.2367328918 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.42419426049 99% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 63.6247240618 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.7273730684 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.498013245 107% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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