Do you agree or disagree It is better to travel abroad to visit different countries when you are younger rather than when you are older Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

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Do you agree or disagree: It is better to travel abroad to visit different countries when you are younger rather than when you are older. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

It seems like that everyone is harbored with a life-long dream of travelling the world, to feel different countries’ customs and practices. Some people think it is better to travel abroad to visit different countries when they are younger rather than when they are older. And I strongly agree with the statement.

Firstly, people have energetic bodies when they are younger than when they are older, which make people have a better experience of travelling abroad in young age. To be more concrete, travelling abroad actually is a laborious and physical-power-demanding journey. It need spend a bunch of time on energy on transportation such as taking a 20-hours plane or take a 40-hours train. This can cause damage to your body, especially when people are older since they are supposed to be sedentary all the time. Old people are not as strong as young people, they may already have some perennial diseases like diabetes, which is not uncommon in old people. So, they usually cannot stand the hard journey when they are old. However, when people are young, they are not disturbed by this kind of problem, and they can have a brilliant experience.

Furthermore, people have better mentality when they are younger than when are older, which let people have a better feeling of travelling in young age. That is because, people’s mentality will degrade as the age’s increase and their brains become slower, which cannot take immediate reactions. This will cause many problems when they are travelling. For example, my grandmother came to Japan to look at me last year. When I showing her around in Japan, I found that my grandmother often lose her way, she did not remember the place where we just passed. Let alone the transportation, which would definitely baffle her. So, it is better to travelling abroad where can generate a lot of problems in young age than when people are older.

Finally, travelling abroad will be better if someone accompany you, which can surely accomplish when people are young, but it is hard to ensure this when people are old. To be more specific, when people are old, everything is uncertain. Some friends of you will pass away; some cannot walk or even move; even they are healthy, take account of their safety, their children may not disagree with their travel. By contrast, when people are young, nothing can be a obstacle for them. They can go abroad with their friends to share happiness and take various adventures. This is the best interpretation of travelling abroad.

In conclusion, it is better to travel abroad when people are young rather than they are old. Because people have many things only when they are young, which are the insurance of having a good experience of travelling.

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Average: 8.2 (2 votes)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, look, may, so, for example, in conclusion, kind of, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 38.0 15.1003584229 252% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 30.0 11.0286738351 272% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2288.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 462.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95238095238 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63618218583 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68787945023 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.463203463203 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 702.9 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.0985217112 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.52 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.48 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.262266770857 0.236089414692 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0899167899744 0.076458572812 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0906159841165 0.0737576698707 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184949318754 0.150856017488 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0604263268577 0.0645574589148 94% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.37 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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