Do you agree or disagree? People gain more happiness from their jobs than their social life.
At the 20th and 21st centuries, with the development of human modern society, people more and more tend to take a break from hectic life and unwind by having sheer hours of happiness. Actually, there are unlimited ways that people can enjoy from their lives. Although some people adhere to this belief that they can feel delighted through social activities, I believe they can acquire happiness from their jobs since they can accumulate a horde of money and also strengthen their self-esteem.
The first aspect to point out is that what provokes people to spend more time in their workplace is gaining money. As a matter of fact, in the competitive world of today, human's life is analogous to a tortuous way in a mountain in quite a few aspects. That is why people try hard and make constant efforts to find a decent job in order to experience independent life. It is axiomatic that being paid more salary makes them more energetic and lively. To illustrate more, take a case of a father who is in charge of a family of four and has convenient salary for instance. Since he has no financial concerns and incomplete plans, not only can he spend a lot of time with his family members, but also he can have sheer hours of happiness. Hence, he can enjoy from his life.
A further subtle point is that fortifying self-esteem can be considered another advantage of having a decent job. It is absolutely undeniable, in today modern life and with its galloping rate of science and technology, jobs are being sophisticated and specialized so much so that everyone in charge of a particular job should enjoy a great amount of experiences in that field, so working provides an opportunity for people to prove their abilities and feel happy and satisfied with their performance. Actually, according to recent research conducted in my country, a person who works 40 hours in a week is by far happier than unemployed person. In my own experience, when I graduated from university, I could not find a satisfactory job for two years and I had difficult times in that period of time because I feel useless and sadness; however, being hired in a company effectively boost my morale. As a consequence, the sense of accomplishment which is gained through being active in society can raise my self-esteem.
On the whole, according to the above-mentioned points and details, it is crystal-clear that a satisfactory job can make a person happy since they can gain a lot of money as well as improving their self-esteem. It is high time we stopped overlooking the fact that a person can feel fortunate just by having social activities. Have you ever seen a person who has financial concerns feel fortunate? Can you consider a person happy with lack of confidence? I absolutely believe no!
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...of confidence? I absolutely believe no!
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Discourse Markers used:
['actually', 'also', 'but', 'first', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'so', 'then', 'well', 'for instance', 'i feel', 'as a matter of fact', 'as well as', 'on the whole']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.214971209213 0.229887763892 94% => OK
Verbs: 0.15547024952 0.158761421928 98% => OK
Adjectives: 0.103646833013 0.0866891130778 120% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0479846449136 0.046263068375 104% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0690978886756 0.0685040099705 101% => OK
Prepositions: 0.136276391555 0.118717715034 115% => OK
Participles: 0.0441458733205 0.0351676179071 126% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.85573165729 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Infinitives: 0.021113243762 0.0309702414327 68% => OK
Particles: 0.00191938579655 0.00188951952338 102% => OK
Determiners: 0.0825335892514 0.0887237588012 93% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0287907869482 0.0209618222197 137% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0134357005758 0.0139019557991 97% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2767.0 2387.08602151 116% => OK
No of words: 479.0 408.028673835 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.77661795407 5.86048508987 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67825486995 4.48200974243 104% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.319415448852 0.338922669872 94% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.217118997912 0.251872472559 86% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.175365344468 0.174417080927 101% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.137787056367 0.112833075102 122% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85573165729 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507306889353 0.524397521467 97% => OK
Word variations: 59.1590705279 59.2087087015 100% => OK
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6684587814 97% => OK
Sentence length: 23.95 20.5533526081 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 82.4965908387 48.84282405 169% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.35 120.699889404 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.95 20.5533526081 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.8 0.644075263715 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.54480286738 36% => OK
Readability: 45.6618997912 45.7405998639 100% => OK
Elegance: 1.45070422535 1.45489161554 100% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.153778274302 0.300154397459 51% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.134283963032 0.103427244359 130% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0744954199485 0.0752933317313 99% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.461036972774 0.497263757937 93% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.153448748597 0.151897553556 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0578477004467 0.114077575197 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0521486361345 0.0781384742642 67% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.352593310828 0.336927656856 105% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0757421822219 0.067059652881 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119563139854 0.210909579961 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0721465336365 0.0618886996521 117% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8870967742 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.86379928315 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.91756272401 20% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 13.0 8.42114695341 154% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.4623655914 81% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.75985663082 36% => OK
Total topic words: 16.0 13.6433691756 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.