Do you agree or disagree? People gain more happiness
from their jobs than their social life.
There is no doubt that nowadays, seeking happiness is the most crucial goal for every individual. In this regard, the most critical question that arises is whether they can find it in their jobs or social life. Although some people believe that everyone can gain happiness from everyday life, others, including me, hold this view that work is the best option to improve satisfaction, because people are happy with their achievements, and they have colleagues who know us in terms of weaknesses and strengths.
The first and foremost reason that people can achieve happiness is their jobs is that they can flourish their abilities at work. No matter how many times they fail in their projects, they would learn from them and try to do best. The more they attain accomplishment in their jobs, the more they feel a sense of satisfaction, which is a special feeling for them. No one could understand the emotion people achieving in their work. Take my personal experience as an example. When I started my job in a private company in which I had tried to get the position a lot, I encountered many difficulties with my co-workers and my manager. So, I put all my efforts into enhancing my acceptance among them. I needed to be considered as an essential part of the company. I struggled with a lot of problems during my job. As time went on, I could fulfill many significant tasks, which made my manager trust me more. It accompanied a high salary. As a result, I was able to achieve success in my job, which brought me many rewards and happiness.
The other equally important reason is the fact that people have much spent time in their work; thus, they would be engaged with their colleagues more than ordinary people. Through this, they explore our weaknesses and strengthen more than others. Therefore, they can provide us some precious advice which is crucial for a prosperous life. As I mentiontioned in the previous paragraph, I could display my competence to my colleagues, and they became helpful in many tough situations I faced. At that time, I figured out that they were a valuable investment in my life, and I could count on them. This reason and example lead us that there is a strong relation between jobs and people work there with a sense of happiness.
In conclusion, I think that people can get happiness and satisfaction in their work. This is because not only can they thrive in their jobs, and they gather rewards and achievements, but also they can make a strong relationship with their co-workers, which provides them more solutions for their problems.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, then, therefore, thus, i think, in conclusion, no doubt, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 84.0 43.0788530466 195% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2135.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 446.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.7869955157 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5955099915 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69833431281 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.508968609865 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 644.4 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.9144071718 48.9658058833 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.8260869565 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3913043478 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.08695652174 5.45110844103 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.255367523571 0.236089414692 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0785204621449 0.076458572812 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0718044619958 0.0737576698707 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179407513857 0.150856017488 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0107723706883 0.0645574589148 17% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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