Do you agree or disagree?
people gain more happiness from their jobs than their social life.
Nowadays, despite the many disparities people have in a wide array of areas so far as one's opinion goes, one point that almost everybody agrees upon is the importance of happiness. This is owing to the fact that happiness is one of the most crucial factors that can enhance the quality of our life. That being said, even in this regard, different opinions might stir heated debates as to which part of our life contributes more to our happiness. one particularly reoccurring idea brought up is that people receive more happiness from their job in comparison with their social life. Many utterly repudiate it an I count myself as one of them. In what follows, the rationale for this thesis will be elaborated by providing two reasons.
First and foremost, we build our social life intentionally and by our own will. On the other hand, in a majority of cases, some aspects of our jobs are imposed on us. In this sophisticated world, we live in, doing a profession is an integral part of our life to become economically independent. That is why people sometimes compromise unpleasant conditions and circumstances of their job to evade the danger of being fired, degraded, or suspended. An example of policeman could aptly shed light on my argument. For instance, take a police authority who works in a metropolitan city, e.g. Tehran. He is expected to confront criminals, thefts, rubbers, outlaws to name but a few. Rarely could he spend a day without tension. Having confronted with the obnoxious situations, he might have wanted to quit his job. What might be the obstacle for him to do so? I would suggest economic considerations and social prestige he receives by working as a police. Otherwise, the abovementioned obstacles are not the matters of consideration in his social life. He freely chooses with whom make friends, to where travel, and in which social event attend. Therefore he could choose options which would make him more happy in his social life.
The other equally important reason which deserves some words here relies on the fact that our social life is more various. As one accepts a job, s/he is expected to handle some duties regularly while there are a plethora of options available in our social life which give us the opportunity to make our life more diverse. So various is our social life that we sometimes even get confused. Needless to say that the more rudimentary our life becomes, the more our happiness declines. Regarding the authentic and undisputable statistics revealed by a research conducted by Center for Psychological Science of University of Tehran, one of the most important factors accountable for the increase of depression among Iranian adults is the routineness of their career.
To put in the nutshell, regarding the reasons that social life is less compulsory and more various, I believe people gain more happiness from their social life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, e.g., first, if, regarding, so, then, therefore, while, as to, for instance, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2404.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 486.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94650205761 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69525374022 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80207631868 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 260.0 212.727598566 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.534979423868 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 783.0 618.680645161 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.5564836458 48.9658058833 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.4615384615 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6923076923 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.80769230769 5.45110844103 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.325928248783 0.236089414692 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0880093771755 0.076458572812 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.110096030866 0.0737576698707 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.258322448283 0.150856017488 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.105314827678 0.0645574589148 163% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 130.0 86.8835125448 150% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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