Do you agree or disagree?
people gain more happiness from their jobs than their social life.
By and large, it is of little debate in today's world that happiness is of great importance. That is inasmuch as people tend to maximize their joy in life and in this regard pursue the happiness, In the Declaration of Independence of USA, Thomas Jefferson stated that: "people have the right to life, liberty and pursuit of happiness". This statement that mentions the happiness as one of the rights with the equal status of life and liberty, shows the crucial necessity of happiness. With this in mind, it is quite expected to notice some of its aspects are somewhat controversial due to its prominent standing; many people wonder what is the essential factor to gain happiness. One idea of prominence in this regard is that people gain more happiness from their jobs than their social life. I personally concur with it. Among the many reasons one can give for this opinion, two will be given to vindicate my standpoint.
First and foremost, people spend most of their time in their workplace. Thus, being in a happy productive work environment with friendly colleagues can expand the borders of happiness that one feels. Moreover, having spent a lot of time in the workplace, one's social life might build up according to what is occurring in that place. For Instance, let's take a policeman and assume that he is facing a lot of stressful situations during a day. The more he compromises the situations, the more he can enjoy his time. On the other hand, if he has a fragile and sensitive personality, he will be frustrated by the irritating situations.
Another equally important reason is that humans need to feel useful in order to feel happy. Based on a recent yet reputable research, conducted by sociology department of University of Tehran on a randomly selected number of employees of public organizations, the majority of them were unhappy due to their feeling of redundancy at their workplace. Rarely were among them someone who overcomes the feeling and have a separate social life. This clearly substantiates the idea that feeling useful and positive can make the employees feel happy.
In conclusion, having analyzed the reasons above, one can safely conclude that people gain more happiness through their jobs than social life. This is due to the reasons given, which are people spend most of their time in a workplace that can be part of their social life as well and humans need to feel useful in order to perceive the concept of happiness. Thus let's hope that every person working can feel positive and happy.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, moreover, so, thus, well, for instance, in conclusion, by and large, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2117.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 431.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91183294664 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55637350225 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72128595663 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501160092807 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 674.1 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.3717946503 48.9658058833 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.85 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.55 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.85 5.45110844103 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.332961603858 0.236089414692 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106980618124 0.076458572812 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.149131208242 0.0737576698707 202% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.211719038677 0.150856017488 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100450742952 0.0645574589148 156% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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