Do you agree or disagree with the statement? Universities should spend as much money on sports as they do on libraries. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Some people argue that universities should focus on libraries and should not spend money on sports becuase the primary role of universities are on education. However, in my opinion, universities should invest on not only libraries but also sports. This is becuase sports are helpful for students to relieve their stress, and sports also enhance student's health which is essential for success.
To begin with, sports can provide an opportuninty to broaden one's experience which can be helpful for one's success. I believe experience is one of the most essential factors of success in this world. Imagine people only have textbook knowledge. Their views will be so narrow. By playing sports with colleagues, they can not only gain diverse experience but also broaden their horizons of the world. For example, I usually played soccer when I was an undergraudate students. By playing soccers, I learned how to collaborate with teammate and moreover, I recognized the importance of respecting others since there are a lot of circumstances where I have a conflict with an opponent. As I work for IT company, our team and I usually encounter the challenging proejct. Thanks for the lessons I learned from playing sports, I was able to manage the project successfully with our team mates. Had it not been for the lessons from sports, I would not have been able to complete the project successfully.
Furthermore, sports can also help students to improve their health. The importance of health should be prioritized. Without good health, nothing can be achieved. Like there is a saying, "Sound body, sound mind", keeping in shape enables students to maximize their work productiviy and be self-confident. In this sense, sport would be of great help. To illustrate, I had avoided playing sports as I regarded it as wasting time. Instead, I always studied and pushed myself hard, regardless of my bad health. Therefore, I was always tired and the efficiency was very low. One day, however, my friend advised me to play sports as health is essential to high productivity. By following his advice, I can make my body healthy, and moreover I can keep higher efficiency than ever before. As a result, not suprisingly, I also get superior grade. It is evident that health has high priority and sport can be one of its way.
To sum up, sport is really important as it can provide students an opportunity to face diverse experiences and it also help students to improve their health. In this regard, I firmly believe that universites should invest on sports as they do on libraries.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, moreover, really, so, therefore, for example, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2155.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 430.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01162790698 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55372829156 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86795106665 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.490697674419 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 657.0 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.7890055835 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.8148148148 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.9259259259 20.6045352989 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.85185185185 5.45110844103 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.129247019367 0.236089414692 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0382287643142 0.076458572812 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0565867182467 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102972137257 0.150856017488 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0595643915673 0.0645574589148 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.48 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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