do you agree or disagree with that television advertising towards children should not be allowed.
I strongly agree and believe that it is a great approach to the training of young children to restrict advertising directed toward them. It is my firm belief that commercials are not suitable for children and it would definitely damage to their personality. Tv advertising not only has a bad influence on the meaning of honesty for children but also delves them into the fantasy world far from reality. I would like to develop these ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.
My primary reason is that children can not make difference between reality and fantasy very well. Companies represent huge illusions and imaginary things in their advertise and a child can not understand the unreal parts of such programs. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my own experience. You see, when I was a little girl I believed in one advertising on the tv and thought that maybe I can fly if I eat some kind of orange juice that showed and it was so dangerous because I wanted to fly from our roof. That's why I think it is hard for children to understand reality.
Secondly, if children see anything or give them any promise, they have believed and trust on it. I think advertising learn to children that lies and false information are not so bad if you gain your goal. Such indirect massages like this have an awful effect on them. It is certainly clear to see why I think commercials change the meaning of some words such as truth for them.
In light of the above mentioned reasons, I strongly believe that television advertising towards children should not be allowed.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, second, secondly, so, well, i think, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 52.1666666667 63% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1330.0 1977.66487455 67% => OK
No of words: 282.0 407.700716846 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.71631205674 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09790868904 4.48103885553 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67992216261 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 212.727598566 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.560283687943 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 412.2 618.680645161 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.881623066 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.0 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1428571429 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.21428571429 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210515453332 0.236089414692 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.071518158255 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0865082305699 0.0737576698707 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156754790579 0.150856017488 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0977853968352 0.0645574589148 151% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.32 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 86.8835125448 55% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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