do you agree or disagree, when p[eople succeed, it is entirely based on hard work. Luck has nothing to do with their success.
Success is the thing that everybody wants to achieve. No one in this world doesn’t want to achieve success. Everyone in this world is passionate and works hard for it. Yet, success means different for different people. For some, success means a good career, money whereas for some it means happy and prosperous life, a good relationship. No one can deny that hard work is the main ingredient to achieve success in ones’ life. However, I strikingly believe that luck also plays a tiny role in achieving that success that we are craving for. To elaborate more on this topic mentioned above, the following reasons and examples will be presented.
First and foremost, I believe that hard work is the main key to reaching the success that everybody desires. Nevertheless, luck plays a vital role. In other words, just simply working hard doesn’t guarantee success most of the time. There are plenty of people running and battling for the same thing that you endeavor for, but sometimes, even after sweating and working days and nights, still we are far from reaching our aim, and all our hard works go in vain and here I believe is due to lack of luck. My aunt’s experience is a compelling example of what I mean. My aunt has finished her medical studies from our country, and she was eager to go oversea for her further studies. Her friend told her that it’s likely unattainable because of high competition however, my aunt studied hard for the exams like everyone else and to her surprised she got accepted into one of the ivy league universities of the United States. Hence, her luck indeed played a role despite a huge competition among the students who have the same qualifications as her.
Aside from the points, I made above to my best knowledge, success is always combined with luck and hard work. It's our responsibility to do our best and work immensely hard and success will always follow us when we have the luck. For instance, two of my friends started their business a few years back, they have the same educational background. Though one of them could not do well and she had to leave her business, while the other friend of mine did tremendously well that her business got expanded and she has many employees working under her. She has also got awarded and acclaimed as one of the best businesswomen of the year. This example illustrates that both of my friends worked extremely hard while one got very lucky that she achieved her success in no time while unlike my other friend.
In conclusion, I disagree with the statement that luck has nothing to do and only hard work plays a role in success because of the reasons that I have mentioned above.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 111, Rule ID: IT_IS[17]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: It's; It is
...lways combined with luck and hard work. Its our responsibility to do our best and w...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, nevertheless, so, still, well, whereas, while, as for, for instance, i mean, in conclusion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2227.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 469.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74840085288 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65364457471 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59213324489 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.505330490405 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 693.9 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.6098567812 48.9658058833 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.8260869565 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3913043478 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.26086956522 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.224160722552 0.236089414692 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0735676636416 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0711716284652 0.0737576698707 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171529628879 0.150856017488 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0711317349066 0.0645574589148 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.27 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.62 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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