do you agree or disagree, when people succeed, it is entirely based on hard work. Luck has nothing to do with their success.
Everyone strives to be successful in life. There are a lot of factors that contribute to the success of an individual. Some believe that achievement is as a result of hard work, and luck plays no vital role in it, others believe that success is based on luck and hard work has nothing to do with it. I am of the opinion, that success is entirely based on hard work, however luck is not a contributor to achieving that success because diligence always brings a positive result as well as proper planning and research.
First of all, when a person succeeds, it is always attributed to how hard he has worked towards attaining that height. Success happens over time. For example, my uncle who started his oil servicing company in his garage twenty-three years ago, with just one equipment and two staff, then he moved to a building a few years later, as he delved into one more aspect of oil servicing, as years went by his company grew tremendously and he purchased his own building, and explored more areas in the business. Now he has offices not only in Nigeria but in the United states and the United Kingdom with over one hundred staff. That was only possible through his diligence and perseverance, Although some people think he may have been lucky at some point.
Secondly, proper planning and research are avenues by which one can attain a certain height therefore, most Successful people take out time to carry out researches and plan before engaging in any business. For instance, my successful uncle, employed a team of researchers to analyse the market before he invests his millions of dollars into drilling of oil and gas, as the market seems saturated, to make sure he would make profit and continually be in business, considering that he has competitors. Besides proper planning and research, he also invested time and money, this goes to tell us that success is not affiliated with luck.
In conclusion, I firmly believe hard work always brings about success with diligence and proper planning and research, as success is a gradual process.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, as well as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1652.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 342.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83040935673 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30037696126 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62194467755 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.567251461988 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 518.4 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 89.0220370297 48.9658058833 182% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.076923077 100.406767564 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.3076923077 20.6045352989 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.0 5.45110844103 238% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229983429094 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0901050913509 0.076458572812 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0871277539513 0.0737576698707 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154985594025 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.112078548203 0.0645574589148 174% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.03 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.76 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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